Educational institutions should dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
The statement asserts that schools ought to disabuse students from pursuing fields of study where they have less chance to succeed. However, I believe that institutions should let students follow their own interests.
Undoubtedly, the institutions do not want the students to be constantly frustrated during the study and have an abysmal academic performance. Schools always want the students to succeed, both for students' own interest and for the schools’ reputation. Besides, it is acknowledged that some subjects highly demand talents. Vocal performance, for example, is not a good fit for everyone, although some of the students may genuinely love singing and would like to pursue it as their major. Some people are born to be better singers than more other people. In such circumstances, dissuading students who are not endowed with pertinent talents saves them from chasing the wind. Nonetheless, this is not always the correct thing to do.
First of all, some students' talents are not so conspicuous, so they could be underestimated. Some people might pick up a skill slowly in the beginning, but can become a master of it once they get a hold of it. Or it could be that the school can simply make a wrong judgement. Albert Einstein, who has almost become a synonym for science, learned to talk at a very late age and was considered as not smart, dissuaded from studying mathematics by his middle school teacher, who is of course proven absurdly wrong. Elvis was also considered unlikely to have a bright career when he just started singing. But now he is certainly an icon of that era and one of the most influential and legendary singers in the history. Therefore, a wrong judgement from the institution could compromise a real genius.
Furthermore, some fields of study need people to explore even though they are intractable and require arduous work. Mathematics and physics, which plays a vital role in most of engineering studies and our everyday life, are infamously known to be difficult to succeed. Image if those great physicists and mathematicians were all dissuaded by their schools, simply because the schools were worried that they might not succeed, how could we have such rapid technology improvements over the history? I would not even be able to take the GRE test on computer this very moment. Therefore, only a wide spectrum of researches nurtures real scientific advancement.
In conclusion, it is rash to jump to the conclusion that schools should dissuade students from dedicating to an area just because they do not think the student are unlikely to be successful. This parochial idea hinders scientific researches, and possibly mistakes a student with talent as unsuitable for a certain field.
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Essay evaluation report
Mathematics and physics, which plays a vital role in most of engineering studies
Mathematics and physics, which play a vital role in most of engineering studies
a wide spectrum of researches nurtures real scientific advancement.
a wide spectrum of researches nurture a real scientific advancement.
flaws:
1. Need to argue against 'Educational institutions', they are not the ideal judges. in the second paragraph:
...dissuading students who are not endowed with pertinent talents saves them from chasing the wind.
how 'Educational institutions' know whether students have 'pertinent talents' or not
2. The fourth paragraph is a little bit away from the topic:
...how could we have such rapid technology improvements over the history?
3. read a good sample:
http://www.testbig.com/gmatgre-issue-task-essays/educational-institutio…
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suggestions:
You may put one more argument if possible. More argument means higher marks.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 449 350
No. of Characters: 2223 1500
No. of Different Words: 246 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.603 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.951 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.742 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 163 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.522 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.161 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.609 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.26 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.474 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 400, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...s not a good fit for everyone, although some of the students may genuinely love singing and...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, of course, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2295.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 449.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11135857461 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88445622223 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56570155902 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 699.3 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.740449438202 405% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.4282252996 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.7826086957 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5217391304 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95652173913 5.21951772744 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208232663625 0.243740707755 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549095685399 0.0831039109588 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046841716202 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131789637876 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386325907534 0.0667264976115 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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