While it might be true that Buckinghum College ought to expand its space for accomadating and attracting more incoming students, making the author\'s argument fairly plausible, a closer scrutiny reveals that the argument is not substantiated by the evidence proffered in the memo.
To begin with, the author asserts that Buchingham College should construct new dormitories because the number of students is predicted to double in the next 50 years. This is problematic because it is really difficult to prescience how many students will there be in that long time. Although the school\'s enrollments are growing currently, this trend is not likely to perpetuate for 50 years. Therefore, the estimation of the number of students should not be viewed as valid. In addition, even if the students are growing, building new dormitories is not as exigent as the author states, for it only doubles in half a century.
What is more, adducing the rising cost for renting an apartment in the town, the director of student housing concludes that off-campus housing is less affordable for students. It is not clear that, however, whether the students really find it difficult to live off-campus. In fact, many colleges and universities lies in less rich communities, where the expenditure for off-campus housing can even be lower than that for on-campus ones. Before any further evidence regarding the price for housing in nearby regions is offered, the author\'s argument simply does not stand.
Last but not least, we do not know whether new dormitories would be attractive for prospective students or not. When choosing which college to apply for, there are a plethora of things students need to consider, teaching quality and reputation of the college being top of them. The author neither convincingly show that the conditions of dormitories are taken seriously by applicants, nor does he or she elucidates how the new dormitories can be a truly fancy attraction standing out among many other factors that sway the students' decisions.
In conclusion, the director of student housing at Buckingham College sees it imperative to build new and attractive dormitories, claiming that students are growing and off-campus housing is getting more expensive. But the memo lacks concrete evidence to espouse the argument, which does not necessitate the building plan at all.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, really, regarding, therefore, while, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1989.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 378.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2619047619 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85300135858 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 215.323595506 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542328042328 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.740449438202 405% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5136758277 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.6 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.93333333333 5.21951772744 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219236779554 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0788327567756 0.0831039109588 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765534050508 0.0758088955206 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131041210947 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0942554552995 0.0667264976115 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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