The author of the letter seems to be quite upset with the objections raised by non city members of the committee at the meeting. He states that in recent meeting important decisions were not taken and that the membership of the committee must be restricted to city members only. On a primary level this suggestion does seem convincing although further check reveals that the argument contains lots of unanswered questions which needs to be cleared to make it more convincing.
Firstly the author states that foolish objections were raised by members who are not residents of oak city. The author needs to clear what were the suggestions and objections raised by the members? It is possible that the objections that seem foolish to author are of great concern to the non residents of the city. For example there may have been a suggestion to dump the garbage of oak city at a particular site outside the residencial area of oak city. Although, the area is right in the middle of other residential areas and dumping garbage at that place will cause nuisance for the residents of that locality. Thus the author needs to provide what objections were raised at the meeting.
Secondly, the author needs to answer that whatever strategies are applied for the improvement of oak city does not affect the people and area outside the city. Decisions taken only by the members of city will be biased. The people coming from outside of the city to work in oak city might get adversely affected by their decisions. For example the city decides that only bicycles are allowed inside the city. It will be quite difficult for people coming from far away to adhere to this rule. They will have to park their vehicles outside the city gates. Which will raise more questions like will the outsiders be provided with appropriate parking space and security of their vehicles?
The author needs to provide answers to how non interference of non residents is going to help committee to make oak city better place to live and work. For example the decision making and execution are two different aspects. What if the decisions are taken in the meeting yet no progress is possible due to bad execution. They take decision of providing free wifi connection throughout the city. However they do not have manpower to execute their plan and to provide the routers in the whole city. Thus, it means that the improvement of city is hindered without interference of non resident members in the committee meetings.
Thus the author needs to provide answers to these questions to make the argument more convincing.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...nce for the residents of that locality. Thus the author needs to provide what object...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ee wifi connection throughout the city. However they do not have manpower to execute th...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ent members in the committee meetings. Thus the author needs to provide answers to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2147.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 442.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85746606335 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51703416458 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.41628959276 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 678.6 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.501963523 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.347826087 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2173913043 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0357058942573 0.243740707755 15% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0125981850946 0.0831039109588 15% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0163574948595 0.0758088955206 22% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0199914348541 0.150359130593 13% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0136290153954 0.0667264976115 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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