Belief is assuming something as true irrespective of empirical evidence. It helps a person to take decisions without dilemmas. This is a constant topic of debate among people from all walks of life. In my opinion, it is better to stick to one's own beliefs. However, if belief system of a person is corrupted than it is better to give up and adopt righteous beliefs. I would like to explore this in the following essay.
First and foremost, belief system of a person helps in the course of action without any quandary. If a person compromises his belief system then he may face confusion in taking decisions. There are chances that he will not be able to take cogent decisions. This may lead to frustrations in life, as person may remain perplexed in mundane actions because his whole assumptions regarding things have been compromised.
Besides this, if a person compromises his belief for some small term gain then he may not remain satisfied in life. Also his integrity will get affected in long term. For example, a person is very honest but in light of certain financial issues at home he takes bribe. This act will ruin his integrity and peace of life. He will not remain happy as his belief system has been shattered. Moreover, people who used to admire him because of his integrity will not look at him with sense of respect.
Last but not the least, however, a person should give up his belief system which is immoral or corrupt. This will not only have negative impacts on him but also on the society. I would like to explain this with the help of an example. The emperor Ashoka gave up in the Kalinga war as it was only leading to destruction of the society. He adopted more scrupulous belief system of Buddhism. Thus, not only Ashoka found his inner peace but also the society reaped the fruits of peace and satisfaction.
To conclude, in most cases, belief system should not be compromised as it impairs the decision of a person and affects the integrity. Yet, in cases where beliefs are immoral then there is no gain in adhering to them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 99, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... course of action without any quandary. If a person compromises his belief system ...
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Line 5, column 117, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...en he may not remain satisfied in life. Also his integrity will get affected in long...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, thus, for example, in most cases, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1698.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 365.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65205479452 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49546182207 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504109589041 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.4377670928 60.3974514979 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 70.75 118.986275619 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 15.2083333333 23.4991977007 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.375 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10167796458 0.243740707755 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0335150146548 0.0831039109588 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0287359444922 0.0758088955206 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0649379401298 0.150359130593 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0146166961667 0.0667264976115 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 14.1392134831 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.8420337079 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.1743820225 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 12.1639044944 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.8971910112 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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