The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
As per the author it is stated that individuals tend to loose their independence and strength as they indulge more into luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life. However, attributing luxuries and convenient lifestyle directly for hampering the growth of individuals into strong and independent persons is not true. It is the personality and attitude that is more responsible for weakening and making a person more dependent.
Luxury and Convenience is something that makes a person’s life more comfortable, but in no way it represents a necessity. However, as individuals becoming more indulged in luxury, generally their behaviour undergoes changes. People often take aeroplanes to reach to different cities in a much shorter time. However, when a person’s reliance on aeroplane increases, it results changes in attitude. As a result, when the person tends to travel to places within a city, he tends to use a car more. In fact, so much that he even ends up using car for buying groceries from a nearby store using a car, rather than going by walk or bicycle. Thus, luxuries and conveniences affect the dependency of the individual by quite a significant amount indirectly.
However, this cannot be said to be true in all cases. Many people tend to spend considerable amount of time using cellphones or watching television. Thus, when they are devoid of these luxuries, they feel they have nothing else to do, but this can be attributed to partial dependence. While, it may seem that this personal dependence is tending to make the person weaker and less independent, nevertheless it cannot be said for sure. It is because, it is the attitude of the individual which encourages to take on new challenges. Thus, blaming luxuries for the negative attitude would be wrong, as there might be something else at work here.
Thus, even though it may seem that luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life tend to make a individual less dependent and weak, this cannot be said for sure. Rather it is the attitude and personality of a person which plays a crucial role in developing the strength and independency of the individuals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
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Message: Did you mean 'taking'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: taking
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Suggestion: an
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...and weak, this cannot be said for sure. Rather it is the attitude and personality of a...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'thus', 'while', 'in fact', 'as a result', 'in all cases']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.217821782178 0.240241500013 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.153465346535 0.157235817809 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0767326732673 0.0880659088768 87% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0742574257426 0.0497285424764 149% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0445544554455 0.0444667217837 100% => OK
Prepositions: 0.113861386139 0.12292977631 93% => OK
Participles: 0.039603960396 0.0406280797675 97% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.02989303899 2.79330140395 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0321782178218 0.030933414821 104% => OK
Particles: 0.00247524752475 0.0016655270985 149% => OK
Determiners: 0.0841584158416 0.0997080785238 84% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.019801980198 0.0249443105267 79% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0173267326733 0.0148568991511 117% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2148.0 2732.02544248 79% => OK
No of words: 353.0 452.878318584 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.08498583569 6.0361032391 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.58838876751 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.356940509915 0.366273622748 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.266288951841 0.280924506359 95% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.232294617564 0.200843997647 116% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.161473087819 0.132149295362 122% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02989303899 2.79330140395 108% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 219.290929204 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518413597734 0.48968727796 106% => OK
Word variations: 55.2655131469 55.4138127331 100% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6194690265 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.6111111111 23.380412469 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.8047141851 59.4972553346 50% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.333333333 141.124799967 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6111111111 23.380412469 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.611111111111 0.674092028746 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.21349557522 77% => OK
Readability: 46.2400062952 51.4728631049 90% => OK
Elegance: 1.36363636364 1.64882698954 83% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352003514742 0.391690518653 90% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.109137305268 0.123202303941 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0734165195694 0.077325440228 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.479191250266 0.547984918172 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.146113226028 0.149214159877 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133139685193 0.161403998019 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0988712304049 0.0892212321368 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.342042259878 0.385218514788 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.075882557479 0.0692045440612 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.270975600237 0.275328986314 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.082289884031 0.0653680567796 126% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.4325221239 77% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88274336283 123% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 7.22455752212 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.5995575221 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.