The author of the prompt has argued that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevents us from becoming enduring human beings. With some qualifications, I agree with this general proposition for reasons that I shall discuss in this essay.
First, it is clear that we simply cannot become stronger unless we face difficult situations. Challenging situations compel us to push ourselves to the limits, enabling us to develop physically and mentally. But such situations are rare in the comtemorary luxury oriented world. Just take the case of our ancient ancestors who were mostly hunter gatherers. Because they had to constatntly search for food, they travelled great distances and overcame many physcial dangers on the way. Compare such a lifestyle to that of ours in which we simply drive, not even walk, to the nearest shopping wall. Simply put, we are no where close to achieving the physical capacities of our ancestors, given the technology that surrounds us.
Second, modern luxuries are making us increasingly dependant on technology, making us more vulnerable to changing situations. For instance, can we imgaine a single day in which we are not using our google maps to reach the workplace? Yet, what if our maps stop working in the middle of the road? Clearly, we shall find ourselves in a very difficult situtation given our lack of a sense of direction. On the other hand, our ancestors could easily make their way back home because they never depended on an external element (i.e the map) to begin with. Truly, modern luxuries, particularly technology, have reduced our independancy as individuals.
On a final note, I should admit that modern day luxuries in some cases enable us to expereince more challenigg situations. This is particularly the case on a mental level. Indeed, when the washing machine frees us from washing our clothes, we may be loosing on some physical activity, but may make up for that by engaging in more englightening activiites such as solving mathemetical puzzles. In other words, modern luxuries can allow us to spend more time on intellectually challenging activiites than had been previously possible, strenghtening our mental faculties to an extent
Overall, however, I still do believe that modern luxuries reduce our independance and weaken us as individuals. Although they can free us to pursue more intellectually edifying activities, modern luxuries disincentivize us from physical exertion and make us more dependant on external elements to achieve our goals.
- People should undertake risky action only after they have carefully considered its consequences. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. 66
- People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting 12
- People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting 16
- Scientists and other researchers should focus their research on areas that are likely to benefit the greatest number of people. 54
- As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoni 75
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: now
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Suggestion: dependent
...ern luxuries are making us increasingly dependant on technology, making us more vulnerabl...
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Suggestion:
...a sense of direction. On the other hand, our ancestors could easily make their wa...
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Message: Did you mean 'dependent' on?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, for instance, such as, in other words, in some cases, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 33.0505617978 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2129.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 406.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24384236453 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98354766994 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5739524438 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.45 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.21951772744 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105800069449 0.243740707755 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0346636715162 0.0831039109588 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433340591915 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0791239627705 0.150359130593 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0670367214717 0.0667264976115 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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