In the memo, the speaker claims that all students should attend the same national curriculum before they enter college. At first glace, it seems plausible enough and supportive empirically, nevertheless, the claim seems specious based on several grounds mentioned below.
First of all, the speaker is assuming that all students have same parental conditions. Yet the assumption is repudiated because students are from various environments. Some students get sufficient support financially from their family so that they can process preliminary education. On the other hand, some students are in harsh conditions that they have to afford their family by giving up their school. For these students, a specialized curriculum, such as allowing them to earn money at daytime and have education at night time, should be established in order to catch up the degree of their peer education. Or better solutions should be made by the government in the regard of citizen welfare.
Nevertheless, the claim is still persuasive given that all students should have fair opportunities when they apply for college. Nowadays, entering college is getting more difficult as the rate of civilization is increasing internationally equals to the rise of educational ambition. In this case, a fair discernment of talented students would be most successful only when all students are in consistent condition, in other words studying the same national curriculum. If students who get advantageous curriculum, then relatively disadvantaged groups are likely to have unfair feelings. It is because as competition becomes familiar, modern society accentuates fairness to provide equal opportunities to everyone. However, if the society makes unfair environment, which is irony, young generations could be disappointed and will likely to have antisocial behaviors forwardly.
However, given that some eminent colleges allow international students, requiring to attend the same national curriculum could not be suitable sometimes. Any college are not easy to let go of talented international students by confining them to have attended their country's national curriculum. Sometimes, system should be flexible to achieve better outcomes. For example, Harvard, known as one of the best colleges, could have not been on this stage if they didn't admitted international students, many of whom are being influential figures in our world these days and elates the power of their college. Thus, requiring students to attend the same national curriculum could sound like a staleness sometimes.
In sum, while at first glance, the claim seems exclusive but it appears not. The claim have some merits. Yet, some points are unpersuasive to agree with the speaker. Therefore, a nation should be flexible when they require the same curriculum to students before attending to their colleges.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 83, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'attending'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: attending
...allow international students, requiring to attend the same national curriculum could not ...
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Line 7, column 460, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...uld have not been on this stage if they didnt admitted international students, many o...
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Line 9, column 89, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...exclusive but it appears not. The claim have some merits. Yet, some points are unper...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, such as, first of all, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2423.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 436.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55733944954 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.986519491 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534403669725 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 760.5 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.0893544492 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.347826087 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9565217391 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47826086957 5.21951772744 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222810946075 0.243740707755 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719844423716 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700955692928 0.0758088955206 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139343603668 0.150359130593 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0207900495351 0.0667264976115 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.1639044944 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 100.480337079 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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