Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
While it may true that number of shoppers decrease by increasing number of skateboarder’s in the central plaza. But the author does not mentions sufficient evidence to prove it. The author failed to mention that from when the skateboarding was allowed in the shopping mall, and who had been responsible for littering and vandalism, and chiefly author is not about growing shoppers if skateboarding would be prohibited.
First, the author mentions that over the previous two years the number of shoppers steadily decrease while the popularity of skateboarding is increase. But the author fails to mention that from when skateboarding has been allowed in central plaza. Author tries to say that popularity of skateboarding has decrease the number of shoppers, but it didn’t make the direct connection between two incidents.
Second, the author also states that there has been an increasing littering and vandalism in the central plaza. However, author did not provide any evidence to prove that. Shoppers and shopkeepers may also be responsible for increasing in littering and vandalism. So, the evidence is not strong to make that connection.
Finally, the author claims that if skateboarding is prohibited in central plaza, once again the number shoppers of central plaza will increase. However, author does not sure about growing shoppers if skateboarding would be prohibited. There is not enough evidence to proves that skateboarder’s are responsible for losing shoppers.
In conclusion, we can say that if the author provides a proper details of the incidents, Provide direct connection between skateboarder’s and shoppers and people who littered and vandalism, and gave a proper estimate of how many shoppers reduced in the central plaza than we can conclude author’s decision of prohibition of skateboarding.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... if skateboarding would be prohibited. First, the author mentions that over the...
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...rect connection between two incidents. Second, the author also states that ther...
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...s not strong to make that connection. Finally, the author claims that if skate...
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Suggestion: prove
...ibited. There is not enough evidence to proves that skateboarder's are responsibl...
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...s are responsible for losing shoppers. In conclusion, we can say that if the au...
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...cision of prohibition of skateboarding.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 58.6224719101 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 2235.4752809 70% => OK
No of words: 283.0 442.535393258 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51943462898 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2713978627 2.79657885939 117% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 215.323595506 56% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.427561837456 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 471.6 704.065955056 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.4156531139 60.3974514979 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.571428571 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2142857143 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310643548437 0.243740707755 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134247614785 0.0831039109588 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125650161144 0.0758088955206 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204407714941 0.150359130593 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0835592130482 0.0667264976115 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.1639044944 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 100.480337079 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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