People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
From where do our attributes and characters come from? This is question of debate for long time and a subject of moot. Here, in the prompt, two sources determining character of any problem are identified: internal ingrained attributes and external environment. In my view, i mostly agree that in our initial infant phase of life internal factors are dominant whereas, as we develop and progress in life physically and mentally, external factors come into play for building our attributes and characters. Following are initial concession as well as two persuasive argument points to make my stand persuasive.
Admittedly, in our early phase of life, our characters depend upon information in our genetic codes. Due to heredity characteristics, we tend to act like our parents and our characters are similar to that of our parents. For instance, belligerent parents tend to have fractious infants. So, at unsullied phase of our life, characters are determined by our attributes entrenched in our DNA code which is transferred from our parents.
However, as we become older and mature, external factors come into play. We slowly defy our natural attributes to adapt changing environment. Without adaptation we cease to exist. For instance, an opulent child in Nepal is forced to cede his lavish lifestyle and learn to survive like a middle class, once he reach USA for further study. In doing so he has to change his inner attributes and eccentricities to survive in this changing environment. So such mutation is necessary for our survival.
Similarly, in genetic science, mutation is most favored by nature and "survival of fittest" prevails. In order to survive, flora and fauna have to develop feature so that they can survive harsh environment. Similarly in humans as well, adaptation is favored. People having extraordinary characteristics are successful in their life. So, external factors compel us to change our attribute so that we become successful and extraordinary in our life.
In conclusion, the subject matter is complex and more study (probably in term of systematic research) is required to accurately predict where do our character comes from. But, as we stand today, the most dominant factor has turned out to be external factors rather than internal one.
- Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways no speaker or reformer ever could. 66
- Government should offer college and university education free of charge to all students. 83
- The effectiveness of a country's leaders is best measured by examining the well-being of that country's citizens. 58
- Requiring university students to take a variety of courses outside their major fields of study is the best way to ensure that students become truly educated. 50
- People's attitudes are determined more by their immediate situation or surroundings than by society as a whole. 75
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...which is transferred from our parents. However, as we become older and mature, ...
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Line 3, column 311, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'reaches'.
Suggestion: reaches
...to survive like a middle class, once he reach USA for further study. In doing so he h...
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Line 4, column 218, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
...hat they can survive harsh environment. Similarly in humans as well, adaptation is favore...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, similarly, so, well, whereas, as to, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.4196629213 8% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 366.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24863387978 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01864595749 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53825136612 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.1744827018 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.3181818182 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6363636364 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.81818181818 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0304052993428 0.243740707755 12% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0117997651926 0.0831039109588 14% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0320964261258 0.0758088955206 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.018113962601 0.150359130593 12% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0137191050987 0.0667264976115 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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