People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
The human mind is a complex personality. Most of the decision making is contingent upon the external factors that are not taken into consideration while brainstorming. Consequently, our decisions and actions are not ours but the product of the things that happen around us. In my view, I certainly agree with the point that our behavior is determined by the forces around us.
There was a huge concern when India was accepted for being the host nation to Common Wealth Games, in 2010. The lack of civic sense among denizens of New Delhi made the Board of directors ponder upon the point whether the capital city can host this Huge event, considering it to be dirty in many aspects. However, the government imposition of the certain rules, for instance, hefty fine if anyone caught peeing at the corners of the wall of the building, Spiting around on the road and public place and even honking more than it is required forces the public to think twice before commending those unruly actions. Also, the government builds the Android App where anyone can send the picture of the person who disobeys the rules and the fine will be sent to his address. These actions eventually affected the physiology of the people and it is certainly true that even after five years of the CWG even we are abiding the rules. Therefore, it can be said that this change in our behavior was affected by the rules of our government.
Speaking in English in India is considered important professionally as our interviews are conducted in that language Also, speaking in our mother tongue, Hindi, bring disdain to yourself and lessen the chances of having effective communication with our supervisors. Even though most Indians are very communal in their first language, ironically it is not as of primary importance as per the English. Consequently, we are forced to learn from the very beginning of our schooling. It is true that this forced effort by society makes us connoisseur and adaptive in this International language and open many doors in our career, however, we lose the primal importance of our mother tongue to the point that some of us can speak Hindi but can not able to read or write in it effectively. Hence, this forced effort largely determine our behavior.
Speaking of my personal example, I was never fond of computer language before my father, being the Software engineer, forced on learning the languages from the age of 13. He understood the importance of IT and learned that the IT sector will rule the world in the next generation. Thereafter, his persistent effort made me learn about the subject and selecting Computer science as the major in my college years. Eventually, it has come to my realization that his forced effort although made my mind in deciding my major, turned out to be one of the important decisions being taken in my life as I am excited to pursue my masters in software architecture.
In conclusion, the aforementioned facts give a clear vision that our personality of decision-making is moreover determined by the external factors that rather our own mindset.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 355, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding forces'?
Suggestion: the surrounding forces
...oint that our behavior is determined by the forces around us. There was a huge concern when Indi...
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Line 7, column 224, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: the; IT
...d the importance of IT and learned that the IT sector will rule the world in the next ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, speaking of, in my view, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 33.0505617978 209% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 58.6224719101 131% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2570.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 526.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88593155894 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76556054295 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51711026616 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 813.6 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.3162162654 60.3974514979 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.5 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.21951772744 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118780904116 0.243740707755 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0435397647895 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0733687865858 0.0758088955206 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0671807386021 0.150359130593 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287580092984 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.