People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Is it solely the external forces that determines one's actions, or demeanor? Or, it is internal forces that largely shapes one's behavior? While few critics - including the author of the claim - might argue that people's behavior is solely determined by external forces - or forces not of own making, yet Homo sapiens (human) being the most intelligent animal of the existence, critics analysis sounds cursory. Therefore, my cut-and-dried view is that of course external environment influence our behavior; however, it is highly unjustifiable to say that it is the sole force to determine human's behavior. But rather, both internal and external forces of human continuously interact with each-other and shapes their attitude.
Firstly, and probably most importantly, it is obvious that external forces influence us; external forces includes external environment, society, its culture and tradition, other people's opinion and many more. To some extent, they shape our behavior as well: for example, a child grown up on abusive family environment becomes pessimistic and rude; then again, a child grown up under a better supervision of educated parents become more civil and courteous. This is an environmental influence, but having said that, we should not overlook the influence of own internal forces on our behavior, which is more profound. Its raining, for instance, and we are very near to a shelter, then we can walk without going to shelter as well. One can do so because he might have wanted to enjoy the rain. In crux, the external environment forced him to go to shelter; he, however, decided based on his own will. Hence, both factors have influence on us and their interaction shapes our bearing.
Finally, as aforementioned, few critics might argue that it is solely the forces which are out of our hand, that is external forces, which shapes our behavior; several real life experiences challenge this claim's validity, however. During the mega-earthquake, magnitude 7.8 Richter scale, of 2015 in Nepal, everyone of my society hurriedly came out of their home, but nevertheless, I stayed inside my own home. The reason they decided to came out so hurriedly was that their house was not earthquake resistant, but again, I decided to stay inside my home, because I was living in a resistant building. Both, the society and I, acted according to the decision of our own international forces. Along with the natural disaster, that is external fury, international force simultaneously acted and we acted accordingly.
To recapitulate, above mentioned examples and arguments make it crystal clear that it is highly unjustifiable to say that only external forces influence our behavior somuch as both the forces interact perpetually and shape our behavior. The example of children grown up in different environments, rainy situation and the situation during mega-earthquake corroborates my position.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 33.0505617978 175% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2451.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 460.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32826086957 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.977208807 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526086956522 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 775.8 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.8961241154 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.0 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2105263158 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05263157895 5.21951772744 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152745740564 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532438521157 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0335397267265 0.0758088955206 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0962330348617 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352799702172 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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