People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting
your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true
and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The speaker asserts that people’s behavior is not determined by their own forces but by other forces. Admittedly, external forces like mass media is powerful enough to construct people’s common sense and change their behavior. Yet, people’s own characteristic and world view are the core determinants of people’s behavior.
With the development of web 2.0 and the prevalence of smartphones, people’s standpoint of viewing the world is largely determined by the social media like Twitter and Facebook. With numerous celebrities like Kim Kardashian going popular in website and gaining millions of likes and retweets for one photo of big ass, young teenagers believe firmly that only women like Kim Kardashian are sexy. Thus, they admit to plastic surgery in a young age. According to the Guardian, having plastic surgery of bigger ass is even more popular than having surgery on eyes or breasts and there are more than 65% of teenage girls saying that they are not confident for their ass and want to have a plastic surgery in the future.
However, people’s own character can determine people’s behavior in a much more important way. People with tenacity and persistence are more likely to persist on their dream and have a more successful life. Take Lara in the film Girl as an example. Lara is a lesbian and a ballet dancer. She wants to be a girl, a successful ballet dancer and have a romantic relationship with the boy downstairs. But as a lesbian, there are lots of mocks all the time, and the process of sex reassignment surgery is too long to bear. So at the end of the movie, she uses a scissor to cut off her penis and finally becomes a girl. It is her character that brings her to her final decision, and it is her determinant character that helps her to finally achieve her dream.
People’s world view can also determine their own behavior. Like in the movie 120 Battlements par minute, those members in the nongovernmental organization “Act up” marched on Paris streets to win the attention from the public and the government on AIDs and LGBTQ, and to prevent the future rampant of AIDs. Unlike most people in 1990s, who believe that only gays can get AIDs, and being sexually minority is sinful and disgusting, members in “Act up” are more open-minded and do not want to keep silent. Thus, they marched on streets, called for equality and used blood to enlighten people. In a conclusion, people’s view of the world, of the society can direct them doing something what they think is meaningful.
In a nutshell, people’s behavior is not only determined by outside factors but also determined by people’s own characteristics and view of the world.
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Comments
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 565, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...r. So at the end of the movie, she uses a scissor to cut off her penis and finally become...
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Line 7, column 342, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1990s'.
Suggestion: in the 1990s
...ure rampant of AIDs. Unlike most people in 1990s, who believe that only gays can get AID...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, so, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2292.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 455.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03736263736 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95422878213 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50989010989 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 93.2231060414 60.3974514979 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.6 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.05 5.21951772744 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138800044453 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0565575002708 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562058378495 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0973089994946 0.150359130593 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430784092377 0.0667264976115 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.