The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
Technological innovations are a key for developing a better functioning society, companies, nations and institutions are all focusing on developing products, techniques and tools to make human life better. It is thus, no shock when billions of dollars are spent on a product which expedites a process – innovation of light bulbs from gas lamps was not cheap. The process of innovation is daunting as at certain cases many of these technological innovations fail miserably – Windows operating system for mobile – although the aim is to provide better functioning, the market reaction plays a major role in deciding its true fate. I prompt directs that the technological advancements should alleviate lives. I strongly agree with it because of two reasons.
Technological advancements shape a better world and this makes faster delivery of products. Indeed, it is true that the primary aim for most innovations, patents and research is to depict tangible result which shape lives – affecting billions. In the process, it has been evident that they somehow improve lives. For instance, introduction of computers made it easy to write documents, edit it and print it which were not a very easy process before – initially we used typewriter on which there were keys which allowed us to write on it, the problem was it was very mechanical, after every line we must realign from the fresh line, moreover, if there were changes to be made we had to make use of whitener. The introduction of modern technology such as computers, have expedited the above process, now just by hitting the back space or using shortcut key buttons we can either add or delete complex chunks of data. Thu, it can be directed from the above instance that the technological advancement has made world a better place, influenced billions of people and is helping us deliver the product with efficacy. The above in turn results in “getting the job done” on time which provides us with leisure time and to do things which enhance our prior arts.
Market perspective play a major role in deciding applicability of innovations, although innovations may increase efficiency of individuals, if the product is confusing or requires great efforts then it is likely that it will not retain its intended application. It is true that we do need easy products to provide solutions to our complex problems, but if the product is difficult to follow then it is very likely that we will not use it. For instance – introduction of Direct Current (DC) for transmission of electricity, although was feasible but it was very difficult to do it in real-time with ease and it was very difficult to explain why, thus we switched to Alternating Current (AC) for transmission purposes. Thus, although a solution can improve our lives and efficiencies – DC has a widespread application in our daily lives today: mobile phones, televisions, remote cells, etc. But, the application is fickle based on ease – AC is used for transmission as it is cost effective and requires a much less overhead when compared with DC. The above demonstrates that we although a solution can provide better lucrative gains, it indeed depends on its ease of application and implementation which directs its usage.
Although, the technological innovations are usually productive and incremental, opponents of the view can argue that many innovations are destructive – TNT (trinitrotoluene), atomic bombs, etc. It can still be noted that these innovations have been useful in a certain way for instance TNT has a heavy applications in mining – for underground explosions and for rupturing buildings. It can be evident that the above results in a real-time tangible application of the innovation which indeed provides leisure time while comparing to previous mining methods. Moreover, introduction of atomic bombs has in a way shaped our society by imposing constraints on it and the further innovation resulted in extraction of energy from nuclear sources – it is regarded as the only source of energy which has a great future perspective. Thus, the application of an innovation depends on the users and their minds, but the only thing which is certain is that the innovation which will ease life will exist and others will perish.
- The increasingly rapid pace of life today causes more problems than it solves 93
- Governments should focus on solving the immediate problems of today rather than on trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future. 66
- The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time. 66
- Some people believe it is often necessary, even desirable, for political leaders to withhold information from the public. Others believe that the public has a right to be fully informed. 80
- Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 301, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'application'?
Suggestion: application
...ertain way for instance TNT has a heavy applications in mining – for underground explosions ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, thus, while, for instance, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.5258426966 189% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.3162921348 230% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 63.0 33.0505617978 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 58.6224719101 131% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3589.0 2235.4752809 161% => OK
No of words: 704.0 442.535393258 159% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09801136364 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.1510191538 4.55969084622 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99780394829 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 321.0 215.323595506 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455965909091 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1127.7 704.065955056 160% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.4909826987 60.3974514979 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.043478261 118.986275619 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6086956522 23.4991977007 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78260869565 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119146169695 0.243740707755 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0412207351228 0.0831039109588 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453908980401 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0726183753687 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346456019993 0.0667264976115 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 14.1392134831 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.8420337079 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 170.0 100.480337079 169% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 11.8971910112 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 11.7820224719 178% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.