Progress should be the aim of any great society. People too often cling unnecessarily to obsolete ways of thinking and acting because of both a high comfort level and a fear of the unknown.
Write a response in which you examine your own position on the statement. Explore the extent to which you either agree or disagree with it, and support your reasoning with evidence or examples. Be sure to reflect on ways in which the statement might or might not be true, and how this informs your thinking on the subject.
Proponent of the statement shows that progress should pursue great society; people only conform anachronistic way to think and action because of high level of comfort, and a fear of the unknown. On the other hand, progress does not necessarily have to pursue great society because traditional way is more comfort and secure than new ways. Society is the big group of people living together, interrelating each other, and sometimes, confronting any incidents, such as great depression, World War 1 and 2. The part of great society is to make people in a good mood and to live in peace. In order to protect great society value, there should be a progress of innovational ways of thinking and acting.
First and foremost, development is come from innovational path. What if we stopped second industrialization, there is no more computers, cars, airplanes, and even technologies. Basically, the ways of obsolete think and act is not for the high comfort, but it makes worse situation where we could not send mail via internet or travel from San Francisco to Los Angeles without transportation. Great society should think about the development whichever people demand and those are mostly come from innovational development.
Moreover, fear of unknown does not exist if people do not try anything and any fear of unknown is another fictional novel that does not exist. When it comes to try something new, it is not about the fear of unknown but is about conservative ideas that make boundary from a new ways of thinking. Take for instance, when we try skateboard, we are frightened about when we fell on to the ground. However, we deliberate again, this is the first step of playing skateboard; we fell down, recognize how to step on the skateboard. As though playing skateboard, innovative ideas and innovational action could make a fear, but if try at least first time, it will have more possibility to have better and great society of all time.
In closing, great society is not easily accomplished, but when we think about the history value; innovational development is the part of the great society to become more comfortable to people. Further, the first step of new ideas and new ways would have fear of unknown, there should be more possible to have better and great society of all time. Therefore, progress should pursue great society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 643, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'progress'.
Suggestion: progress
...ct great society value, there should be a progress of innovational ways of thinking and ac...
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Line 5, column 278, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'way'?
Suggestion: way
...ive ideas that make boundary from a new ways of thinking. Take for instance, when we...
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Line 7, column 397, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., progress should pursue great society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, at least, for instance, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1957.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 394.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96700507614 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84415410162 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469543147208 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.740449438202 405% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.333976413 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.117647059 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1764705882 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 5.21951772744 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241230080987 0.243740707755 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0942075693038 0.0831039109588 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0848425238899 0.0758088955206 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164974776312 0.150359130593 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0797601116302 0.0667264976115 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 100.480337079 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.