Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
People love controversial issues, and mass media tend to follow those notorious news. The effect of scandal may vary by types, aftermath of huge scandal can be greatful. Thus, some might believe that scandals can focus attention from the public and make huge effects. However, while I do not disagree with the fact that scandals can draw popular voice’s attention, I personally disagree to the fact that scandal alone is the only factor that can attract people’s attention and no speacker reformer can achieve such phenomenon.
First, there are historical cases that a single writer or reformer created enormous popular voice nationwide, and even beyond national borders. In case of Thomas Paine, one of founding fathers of United States of America wrote very controversial book that led to the independence of former British conlony, and that country became the world’s strongest counrty. His book literally changed world history. In his book, “Common Sense,” he argued that it is common sense that small country with tyrannical monarchy cannot rule the continent that will form a democratic government. His book hugely drifted Americans and public sentiment had become favorable toward the independence from England. Other exmple from the history could be Karl Marx. Marx wrote very impactful book that shaked the world history in 19th and 20th century. In his book, “The Capital,” he argued that capitalism is uneven system that exploit the working class, the public, and therefore it should be reformed. This argument created huge debate and social, political movements all around the world, and many monarchies and capitalist countries had turned into communism. These refromers and ideologists have succsefully drawed attention of the public.
Second, in case of politics, single leaders can create controversy and successfully gain the support of the people. One negative, but succesful in gaining political authority is Aldolf Hiter. Hitler, after the First World War, by manipulating the germans, successfully won on the election, creating Nazi Germany. His personal belief and public speaking drawed attention from the tired, creastfallen germans to vote for them. The result, as we can learn from the history, led us to the Second World War, and many young soldiers and innocent civiians suffered from it. However, there are still academical and public interest on Hiter, based on the actions he took, and the fact he is the one who did that. Researches on why he started war and rumors and conspiracy theories around his trivial personal histories are out there with much attention. These cases can also be found in case of populist leaders gone dictators. They manipulate the popular and use them a tool to gain power. They are very controversial and attention gatering, as they argue in a strong tone and provative vocabularies and insiuating argument to get the power against current political system. A case of Juan Ferron come to mind. Once a savor of argentineans, he is also being criticized as a populist who broke the country.
I do not contend that the scandals does not have any power that can draw attention from the public. People have tendency to seek out for those scandals. In case of Edward Nixons’s Watergate Scandal, people actually did not care about political corruptions in elections. Only rumors were spreading out, but most of them were regareded as one of conspiracy thories. However, as we know, those rumors turned out to be real in action, and Nixon had to resign, could not finish his job as the president. This was one of the most attention attracted moment in American history. A whistleblower can also make scandals, scandals following a exposure. Edward Snowden’s whistleblow that revealed the surveilance system ruled by NSA, PRISM, led to huge debate not only in the States but also in the world as NSA underwent enormous surveilance.
In conclusion, while I personally do not disagree with the fact that scandals are powerful enough to draw attention from the public, it is not the only way to do so. As we can see from many historical examples, we can also acknowledge that leaders, reformers, and even some conscience voices can also draw attenntion from the public, while some may have led to scandals afterwards.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The effect of scandal may vary by types, aftermath of huge scandal can be greatful.
Error: greatful Suggestion: grateful
Sentence: However, while I do not disagree with the fact that scandals can draw popular voice's attention, I personally disagree to the fact that scandal alone is the only factor that can attract people's attention and no speacker reformer can achieve such phenomenon.
Error: speacker Suggestion: speaker
Sentence: In case of Thomas Paine, one of founding fathers of United States of America wrote very controversial book that led to the independence of former British conlony, and that country became the world's strongest counrty.
Error: conlony Suggestion: colony
Error: counrty Suggestion: country
Sentence: Other exmple from the history could be Karl Marx.
Error: exmple Suggestion: example
Sentence: Marx wrote very impactful book that shaked the world history in 19th and 20th century.
Error: shaked Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: These refromers and ideologists have succsefully drawed attention of the public.
Error: refromers Suggestion: reformers
Error: drawed Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: succsefully Suggestion: successfully
Sentence: One negative, but succesful in gaining political authority is Aldolf Hiter.
Error: succesful Suggestion: successful
Sentence: His personal belief and public speaking drawed attention from the tired, creastfallen germans to vote for them.
Error: creastfallen Suggestion: crestfallen
Error: drawed Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: The result, as we can learn from the history, led us to the Second World War, and many young soldiers and innocent civiians suffered from it.
Error: civiians Suggestion: civilians
Sentence: They are very controversial and attention gatering, as they argue in a strong tone and provative vocabularies and insiuating argument to get the power against current political system.
Error: insiuating Suggestion: insinuating
Error: provative Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: gatering Suggestion: gathering
Sentence: Once a savor of argentineans, he is also being criticized as a populist who broke the country.
Error: argentineans Suggestion: agencies
Error: populist Suggestion: popular
Sentence: Only rumors were spreading out, but most of them were regareded as one of conspiracy thories.
Error: regareded Suggestion: regarded
Error: thories Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: A whistleblower can also make scandals, scandals following a exposure.
Error: whistleblower Suggestion: whistle lower
Sentence: Edward Snowden's whistleblow that revealed the surveilance system ruled by NSA, PRISM, led to huge debate not only in the States but also in the world as NSA underwent enormous surveilance.
Error: surveilance Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: whistleblow Suggestion: whistle low
Sentence: As we can see from many historical examples, we can also acknowledge that leaders, reformers, and even some conscience voices can also draw attenntion from the public, while some may have led to scandals afterwards.
Error: attenntion Suggestion: attention
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flaws:
1. the essay is not exactly right on the topic. this essay need to argue against whether 'Scandals are useful' or not, not to argue against the reason 'because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.'
so the argument 1, argument 2 are out of topic.
2. if we disagree the statement, we can make some arguments like:
scandals are useful, as some of them have actually revealed important problems. However, simply revealing issues does not always lead to the positive outcome.
Even though Scandals focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could, it doesn't mean they are useful.
scandals often to be not only useless but actually can be deleterious since it can distract people from understanding the critical aspects of an issue.
3. No. of Words: 697 350 //user less examples.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 23 2
No. of Sentences: 36 15
No. of Words: 697 350
No. of Characters: 3476 1500
No. of Different Words: 332 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.138 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.987 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.594 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 259 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 188 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 134 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 86 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.361 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.564 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.528 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.248 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.401 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 286, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[2]
Message: Consider using 'do disagree that' or 'do agree that'.
Suggestion: do disagree that; do agree that
...and make huge effects. However, while I do not disagree with the fact that scandals can draw popular voice's ...
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Line 3, column 441, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...history. In his book, 'Common Sense,' he argued that it is common sense that...
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Line 3, column 874, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
... century. In his book, 'The Capital,' he argued that capitalism is uneven sy...
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Line 7, column 637, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... also make scandals, scandals following a exposure. Edward Snowden's whistle...
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Line 9, column 35, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[2]
Message: Consider using 'do disagree that' or 'do agree that'.
Suggestion: do disagree that; do agree that
...e. In conclusion, while I personally do not disagree with the fact that scandals are powerful enough to draw at...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, therefore, thus, while, even so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 14.8657303371 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.3162921348 186% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 33.0505617978 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3625.0 2235.4752809 162% => OK
No of words: 697.0 442.535393258 158% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20086083214 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.13816675137 4.55969084622 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79524594918 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 349.0 215.323595506 162% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.500717360115 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 1130.4 704.065955056 161% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 6.24550561798 272% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 11.0 1.77640449438 619% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 36.0 20.2370786517 178% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.0428213846 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.694444444 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3611111111 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.08333333333 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 5.13820224719 331% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101039140223 0.243740707755 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0269805969496 0.0831039109588 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0310308984293 0.0758088955206 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.066604139721 0.150359130593 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0318505470163 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 192.0 100.480337079 191% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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