Government's work should be monitored by the public. Usually, media broadcasts the new policies and projects planned by the government. In doing the work representative of the public, it is the right and obligation of democratic citizens to look an eye on the work of their leaders. However, not every information should be open to the public for the social stability and national security.
Admittedly, concealing information from the public has a potential of political corruption. This is because people can earn money from holding information about developments. For instance, when there will be a development in a certain region, only those with information knows that the real estate price would soar up in that area. Thus, the political leaders often caught buying the buildings or lands in the potential development region which they tried to blow up their fortunes. Therefore, this kind of administrative information could be shared with the public to prevent the corruption followed.
However, except from this money-related cases, in most events, political leaders' work are of a crucial characteristic to nation's security. If secretive information related to military and intelligence agencies are open to anyone, it will be hard for the agencies to work against the possible enemy countries. For instance, when a nation under a war with another nation, set a military plan and it was revealed to the public and also by the enemy country, the enemy country will protect in advance and make the plan invaluable. Therefore, these information related to the national security should be confined from the public use.
Besides, the public, compared to the political leaders, are lack of professional knowledge to deal with information. It is easy to make a rumors about the policy and disrupts the social stability. For instance, when U.S and Korea was made free trade agreement, people easily believed the rumor that beefs from the U.S. is from the ill cows that eating those beefs would make one get the same disease in the brain. Many people assured that the rumor was right without appropriate evidence and protested against the government. Even though now, no one believe that was reasonable, at that time, public response was rather irrational and impetuous. Therefore, the lack of knowledge in the issue might lead the public misinterpret the information and make a social unrest.
To sum up, the sharing of information with the public can be positive considering its benefit to prevent corruption. However, considering the potential of attack on national security and the social unrest caused by misinterpretation of the information, it is desirable that the political leaders withhold information with discretion.
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Essay evaluation report
only those with information knows that
only those with information know that
beefs from the U.S. is from the ill cows
beefs from the U.S. are from the ill cows
no one believe that
no one believes that
the lack of knowledge in the issue might lead the public misinterpret the information
the lack of knowledge in the issue might lead the public misinterpreting the information
flaws:
No. of Words: 436 while No. of Different Words: 207 //need to polish sentences
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 436 350
No. of Characters: 2241 1500
No. of Different Words: 207 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.57 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.14 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.887 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.762 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.557 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.528 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.085 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Governments work should be monitored by ...
^^
Line 5, column 540, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...nd make the plan invaluable. Therefore, these information related to the national security should...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 138, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a rumor' or simply 'rumors'?
Suggestion: a rumor; rumors
...al with information. It is easy to make a rumors about the policy and disrupts the socia...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 220, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: S
... social stability. For instance, when U.S and Korea was made free trade agreement...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, look, so, therefore, thus, for instance, kind of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2305.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 435.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29885057471 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97890056782 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494252873563 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0746923579 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.761904762 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339664299876 0.243740707755 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101426586153 0.0831039109588 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517262559161 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184013094442 0.150359130593 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295402373158 0.0667264976115 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.