Young people are the future of our society who will make the world evolved by their efforts in every area. It is meaningful to set a goal for the yoyng people themselves. Compared with the long-term and short term as well as the realistic goals or fame and recoginition, there should be a sequence for them which differentiated by time and significance.In my opinion, the long-term targets is consituted with short-term targets,meanwhile the realisitc or visonary is depened on what the young people chasing for. To make them clear, I will address my views below.
To begin with, if you want to build a house, you should built it step by step, that is the conception in my mind to explain the relationship between the long-term goals and short term plans.
Firstly, you can not draw a picture with out pens and papers, I belive this simple metaphor will make it more understandable for us to comprehend this conception. So when we make big plans, that's great because you have dreams, we should devide it into several steps in order to realize it more efficiently. For example, the Space X company planned to migrant people to the Mars in 2030s. That's impossible now while the company got their own plan. Last year, they successfully to launch a rocket which carried a Teslar electroic car to testify the transporting ability of the rocket they designed to go to the Mars.In 2020, they will launch a satellite to Mars to make more research of the planet. Later they will dispatch astromoners to the Mars to make living experiments there. In 2030s, this siginificant goals that could solve the population issue on Earth would be realized if these previous plans success.So this is not a fiction moive again while the true plans by human, step by step.
Secondly,we should not take the long-term and short-term goals of the young people's
apart because they are cohesive and should be relatively combined.So this is not a black or white choice while a wise strategy for the young people.On the other hand, one should make the long-term target first and set up short term goals to realize it as we discussed.In this way ,they are not controversy.
In addition, whether the goal is realistic is hard to determine as we can not define a signle goals with the atittude of one's own. Newton discovered the Gravity after hitting by an apple from the tree, while not every could find this important theory by the hitting of apple. That's why geinuses are mostly alone thus it explain the realistic is a relative definition.When talking with the goals of young people, the realistic goals are practical for them if they need a basical realization no matter in material of minds. While there are some young people who chased the goals could not be comprehened by others then. Like Copernious who assumed the heliocentroism, his theory was violated the laws of religion which sentenced him to death, while in the present day, we appreciate his theory which save us from misguided by the wrong one.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while, for example, in addition, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2482.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 516.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81007751938 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72051334071 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513565891473 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 748.8 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.9413886772 60.3974514979 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.888888889 118.986275619 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6666666667 23.4991977007 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.44444444444 5.21951772744 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 7.80617977528 269% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273232190051 0.243740707755 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0816984548018 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760994507242 0.0758088955206 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174072488038 0.150359130593 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588105824028 0.0667264976115 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.21 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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