The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.

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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.

The graph illustrates information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries

Firstly,took the graph it shows how to use water in worldwide the usage of water in 3 ways domestic use,industrial use and agricultural use in this graph x-axis shows years and y-axis shows km.

Secondly,in the whole century the domestic usage of water is constant in mid of the century remaining period gradually increased but it settled on 300 km.The industrial usage of water is also stable in half of the century rest of the period slowly raised but it resolved on 900 km.But the agricultural usage of water is regularly increased and it reached at top 3000 km.

Thirdly,according to table brazil has only 176 million population the irrigated land has 26.500 km but the huge consumption of water per person that is 359 m coming to Democratic republic of congo it has 5.2 million population and huge irrigated land 100 km but the consumption of water per person is only 8m.

Finally,the huge different between two countries that is consumption of water according to graph agricultural usage of water is huge in comparing another two usages.

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