It is often said that the subjects taught in schools are too academic in orientation and that it would be more useful for children to learn about practical matters such as home management, work and interpersonal skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The primary purpose of educational institutions is to produce well-versed employees capable of completing their work with efficacy. In this regard, urging schools to focus on the practical aspects of the work at hand is a laudable initiative. Nevertheless, I believe that a theoretical approach to learning as paramount as practical work experience to an individual’s career.
On one hand, while some occupations, such as waitressing and barber, necessitate little academic background, other fields of work such as law or medicine require a profound knowledge of the subject area. In the former s...
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Sentence: However, in the case of law and medicine, one individual is unlikely to retain such a vast amount of facts which can only be embedded in books, explaining the years of academic studies which the student must spent before being permitted to practice.
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Suggestion: Refer to must and spent
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