In many countries people working in sport and entertainment earn more money than professionals like doctors, nurses and teachers. Why do you think this happens in some societies and do you consider it is good or bad?
Most countries tend to develop their foreign policy rather than citizen’s welfare. Some people argue that, governments should be more cautious on supporting educated people, while others, namely politicians show more interest on the fields that bring fame to the country. So, how to run this policy?
We must acknowledge that, culture as well as sport makes countries become popular all over the world. For example, any world-known singer is able to show the culture if his country and make foreigners show more interest in his country. In addition, sport competition aim to help countries become more popular, wherein sportsmen have more responsibilities in this regard and they have a great impact on encouraging children to build a healthy lifestyle as well. For instance, children have a great interest on sportsmen’s lives that they follow enthusiastically; therefore sportsmen as well as people working in the culture sphere should feel the support of governments.
On the other hand, governments should take into account that, educated people is the soul of the country. For example, teachers at school are considered to be second parents of children, who spend almost half of their life time with their pupils. In addition, considering the fact that, everyone, including sportsmen or people working in entertainment, needs to study at least secondary school as well as see a doctor while feeling sick. For example, a singer should have a university diploma therefore to become more professional in his field. As well, sportsmen regularly visit doctors in order not to have any serious health problem. This is why governments should be more careful with supporting professionals.
In conclusion, taking both sets of arguments I would like to reiterate that, governments should develop both foreign and internal policy at the same time and be more attentive on providing high living standards for professionals.
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- In many countries people working in sport and entertainment earn more money than professionals like doctors nurses and teachers Why do you think this happens in some societies and do you consider it is good or bad 81
- Some people argue that the amount of violence shown in films and on television has led to an increase in violent crimes in society Do you agree with this argument Should the government control what is shown on television and in the cinema 76
- Most developed countries spend a large proportion of their heath budgets on expensive medical technology and procedures This money should be spent instead on health education to keep people well To what extent do you agree or disagree 74
- Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves? 67
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