It is generally agreed that people in this era spent numerous time to stay at the office. They do it to reach their purpose to buy the good things that can give them comfortable lives. However, it gives some detrimental things such as lost the number of traditional value.
The fact of the matter is that the majority of people work hard to buy mobile phones. They buy it to make their life become easier when they want to make conversation with their friends who stay very far from their country. These things not only give them the benefits but also make their traditional value become gone. ...
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Sentence: According to the University of Sudirman' research that peoples who already have a mobile phones will lazy to visit their hometown when new years comes because they think that they simply need to text their family than to go to their hometown, which needs to spent much money.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to will and lazy
Sentence: Moreover, people become hard worker because of want to complete their fashion soul.
Description: The token of is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to of and want
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Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 352 350
No. of Characters: 1645 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.331 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.673 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.275 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 101 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 66 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 42 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.421 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.438 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.511 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.123 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5