Some people are of opinion children should be rewarded for good behaviour others think that they should be punished for bad behaviour Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some people are of opinion children should be rewarded for good behaviour others think that they should be punished for bad behaviour. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The debate over a child's behaviour is difficult due to distinct view points. Although, to encourage the spirit of children, they should be rewarded for good behaviour. However, punishment should also be there for rude behaviour. Here, i would like to endorse my views on both the statements with my own perception.

There are manifold points to support the view point of people who preferred to reward children for good behaviour. Firstly, rewarding is a good act to give a signal for positive reaction in the child's brain which encourage child to behave nicely in the future. Thus, it is better for both parents and society. Secondly, the process of rewarding children maximizes there confidence as well as they achieve more self respect. What is more, competitive spirit increases among them while rewarding, prove better not only for them but also other imitate from them to achieve same reward. Thus, every individual temp for reward and automatically behave good towards other.

On the contrary, punishment is also necessary to prevent them from bad behaviour. First and foremost, punishment must be there to make them realise their mistake. As a result, in coming days, they will fear before behaving frosty to anyone. Moreover, the principle objective of setting punishment is to avert them from bad habits to ensure their bright future. What is more, not only punishment, parents should also set guideline to avoid them from such bad behaviour. On the flip side, only rewarding is quite possible to encounter more serious problems later in their life. Hence, not only rewarding, punishment should be there to save their future.

In my notion, although, rewarding is a great step to behave good, time and again. However, punishment is also a useful to set limitations towards them. Moreover, in my opinion there should be a equal balance between both the reaction of punishment and rewarding to set them noble character.

All in all, as per my above discussion it is evident that both have there own importance to make them a brilliant person in life.

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Sentence: First and foremost, punishment must be there to make them realise their mistake.
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In my notion, although, rewarding is a great step to behave good, time and again. However, punishment is also a useful to set limitations towards them. Moreover, in my opinion there should be a equal balance between both the reaction of punishment and rewarding to set them noble character.

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There are some defects for the sentence:

1. Don't put although and however together. although or however is enough.

2. ' although, rewarding is a great step to behave good, time and again.' is a clause, not a sentence, you can't put a period '.' to end it up. There should be a sentence following.

3. Since you have 'In my notion', you don't need 'in my opinion' again.

4. Other few changes.

before:
In my notion, although, rewarding is a great step to behave good, time and again. However, punishment is also a useful to set limitations towards them. Moreover, in my opinion there should be a equal balance between both the reaction of punishment and rewarding to set them noble character.

after:
In my notion, although rewarding is a great step to behave good, punishment is also a useful way to set limitations towards them. Moreover, there should be a equal balance between the reaction of punishment and the rewarding to set them noble character.