When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, every countries try to improve their technology. Modern technology change the way of our lives. However, a country develop its technology, at the same time, its lost traditional skills. Some people think is doesn't necessary to keep alive the traditional skills. On other hand somebody think keep them alive is important.
In my opinion, every kind of technology is very good. Technology make our lives more than easier and comfortable the past. For example modern technology change the way of communication. Today everybody can use the Internet, email, Skype, video chat for contact to everybody in whole world. Or modern factories produce new equipment, that used Artificial intelligence. And also modern technology become cheaper than the traditional.
Although the traditional skills are thing, that we called them experiences. We need our past history and our the traditional skills. The traditional skills or experiences are light of our lives. We can't lose our experiences because everything that we want invented in future needs current experience. Next generation of us must know about how we achieve the modern technology. The traditional skills is our history, our culture, our identity. we must keep them alive.
Finally, everyday modern technology is better than the current time. I know the traditional skills become useless . It is every important to consider when the current time past, current technology will become traditional skill. We must use the traditional skill to make better modern technology. And we can join modern and traditional technology to achieve new technology
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Sentence: Modern technology change the way of our lives.
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Sentence: However, a country develop its technology, at the same time, its lost traditional skills.
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Sentence: Some people think is doesn't necessary to keep alive the traditional skills.
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Sentence: Technology make our lives more than easier and comfortable the past.
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Sentence: For example modern technology change the way of communication.
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Sentence: And also modern technology become cheaper than the traditional.
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Sentence: We need our past history and our the traditional skills.
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