The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pictures illustrate about a construction new land to make holiday facilities for tourist. Before under construction, the land has some coconut trees and a beach on the left corner. The land has 100 metres with two sea up and down that land.
There are many changes after construction. First, the island has a place for tourist living. These are fifteen cottage with six on the left reception and nine on the right reception. The location of reception is on the central land has restaurant behind the reception office. Tourist can use vehicle start from pier where tourist arrive until around the reception an restaurant. But, tourist can not use that for go to accommodation and beach because that provides for pedestrian. The island has a save beach for swimming on the left corner.
To sum up, the given data indicate that an island had big construction of some tourist facilities. It has a log time and spent much money to make tourist curious and interest to come to that land.
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Sentence: The two pictures illustrate about a construction new land to make holiday facilities for tourist.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to construction and new
The land has 100 metres with two sea up and down that land.
Description: can you re-write this sentence?
These are fifteen cottage
These are fifteen cottages
The location of reception is on the central land has restaurant behind the reception office.
Description: two verbs in one sentence. can you re-write this sentence?
Tourist can use vehicle start from pier
Description: two verbs in one sentence. can you re-write this sentence?
The island has a save beach for swimming on the left corner.
Description: why 'a save beach'?
Sentence: But, tourist can not use that for go to accommodation and beach because that provides for pedestrian.
Description: The word go is not usually used as a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to go
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No. of Words: 172 200
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No. of Different Words: 94 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.621 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.651 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.512 2.4
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No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 38 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 22 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 16 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 3.659 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.25 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.395 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.546 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
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