The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar graph describes the amount of regular physical activities performed by men and women of age groups from 15 to 65 in Australia during the year 2010.
The diagram illustrates that men at the age group belonging to 15-24 had the highest physical activity accounting to 52.8% and the gradually decreased to 39.5% of age groups from 25-44. A slow increase of 2% was seen in further age groups from 45 to 65+. Women physical activity was 47.7% in the age group 15-24 then had a rapid increase about 5% till the age group up to 54 following a little decrease of .3% in 55-64 and 6% for 65+ age group.
The highest physical activity for men about 52.8% was seen in 15-24 age group and 53.3% in women at 45-54 age group. It was observed that least activity in men was seen in age group 35-44 which was about 39.5% and 47.1% at 65+ age group in women. Finally the age group of 65+ seemed to be similar for both men and women.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 247, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...5% and 47.1% at 65+ age group in women. Finally the age group of 65+ seemed to be simil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, then, at least
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 756.0 965.302439024 78% => OK
No of words: 176.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.29545454545 4.92477711251 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.18323817428 2.65546596893 82% => OK
Unique words: 82.0 106.607317073 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465909090909 0.547539520022 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 211.5 283.868780488 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8876178221 43.030603864 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.0 112.824112599 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1428571429 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 5.23603664747 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245659278283 0.215688989381 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157563784142 0.103423049105 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506679591055 0.0843802449381 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21106832378 0.15604864568 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0240549945229 0.0819641961636 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.94 61.2550243902 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.96 11.4140731707 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 8.06136585366 86% => OK
difficult_words: 23.0 40.7170731707 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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