The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given bar charts demonstrate the ratios of employed workers of both genders in Australia, Japan, Ireland in the years 2005 and 2015.

Generally speaking, there were upward trends in all countries and Japan accounted for the highest and lowest percentages of males and females in employment in both years.

In 2005, the proportion of employed male workers in Japan was approximately 75% and rose slightly to around 78% in 2015. Those figures in Ireland saw a marginal growth from about 68% to 70% in the examined period, lower 7% and 8% compared to Japan respectively. In 2005, the percentage of men having occupation in Australia is the lowest in comparison with other countries, accounted for roughly 62%. However, it experienced a quite noticeable rise to 70% in 2015, the equal ratio to Ireland in the same year.

In 2005, the percentage of women having job in Ireland was largest, occupied for about 44% and it saw a slightly increase by 6%, made up approximately 50% in 2015. On the contrary, the proportion of women in employment in Japan was the smallest over the surveyed period. Its ratio was just about 30% in 2005 and went up quite marginally to 34% in ten years. On the other hand, the ratio of females having job in Australia increased significantly from around 38% in 2005 to about 55% in 2015, which made it become the biggest ratio of employed female workers in three countries at the end of the survey.

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Average: 7.6 (19 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 33.7804878049 175% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1183.0 965.302439024 123% => OK
No of words: 248.0 196.424390244 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77016129032 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 3.73543355544 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69923764144 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 106.607317073 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504032258065 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 348.3 283.868780488 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1294433858 43.030603864 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.3 112.824112599 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8 22.9334400587 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.23603664747 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188948094151 0.215688989381 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810135476587 0.103423049105 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463553307277 0.0843802449381 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125158988162 0.15604864568 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0289724613797 0.0819641961636 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 40.7170731707 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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