The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feautres, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feautres, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Suyunbek on Fri, 02/03/2017 - 13:50

The given are pie charts reveal the amount of water in percentage which was used for diverse purposes in six main areas of the world. Overall, Africa, Central Asia and South East Asia took the precedence over the rest of the areas in terms of using water for agricultural purposes pointing 84%, 88%, and 81% respectively, whereas North America and Europe used water for industrial purposes overwhelmingly greater than the other areas (48% and 53% respectively).
Regarding the category domestic use, it is evident that South America was the greatest among the other areas being 19%, however, both Central Asia and South East Asia in the category domestic use had the same percentage (pointing 7%). Likewise, South East Asia was marginally higher than the others except North America and Europe showing 12% usage of water for industrial purposes.
It can be obtained that, South America indicated 71% water usage for agriculture which was bigger amount than the usage of North America and Europe indicating 39% and 32% respectively.
To summarize the pie charts, almost all of the areas used from water for agricultural purposes in an enormous rate whilst in the category domestic use they had low rates

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...in six main areas of the world. Overall, Africa, Central Asia and South East Asia...
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...ial purposes. It can be obtained that, South America indicated 71% water usage ...
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.... To summarize the pie charts, almost all of the areas used from water for agricultural ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, likewise, regarding, so, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 33.7804878049 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1004.0 965.302439024 104% => OK
No of words: 198.0 196.424390244 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07070707071 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56203514402 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520202020202 0.547539520022 95% => OK
syllable_count: 323.1 283.868780488 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.4926829268 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.0299076494 43.030603864 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 167.333333333 112.824112599 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0 22.9334400587 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 5.23603664747 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230522272963 0.215688989381 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143705100365 0.103423049105 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103477209469 0.0843802449381 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145465613296 0.15604864568 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0969090751241 0.0819641961636 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 13.2329268293 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 61.2550243902 62% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 6.51609756098 200% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.3012195122 157% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 11.4140731707 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.4329268293 166% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.9970731707 138% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.0658536585 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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