The diagram below shows how geothemal energy is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by hhpour on Sat, 12/30/2017 - 06:38

Given is a figure illustrating electricity production process from Geothermal resources.
As shown in the figure, cold water as the raw material, in the first step, is pumped down from the ground into 4.5 kilometers below ground level. After this, it can be seen that the water is injected in a horizontal way in order to be passed in Geothermal zone, consist of hot rocks, and then is preparing for the third step. Now, hot water is pumped up to the surface of the earth from more than 4.5-kilometer depth.
The fourth stage of the electricity production process, entails the conversion of the hot water into steam. As it is shown in the figure this conversion is undergoing by Condenser. Finally, in the fifth and final phase, Turbine is rotated and powered by steam and immediately after the rotation of turbine as a consequence generator is powered.
Overall, From the information supplied, it is evident that this process involving five steps, which begin with using of cold water in the first step and end up with utilizing of Turbine and Generator in the fifth and final phase.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ion process from Geothermal resources. As shown in the figure, cold water as th...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a horizontal way" with adverb for "horizontal"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... can be seen that the water is injected in a horizontal way in order to be passed in Geothermal zon...
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...th from more than 4.5-kilometer depth. The fourth stage of the electricity prod...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...conversion of the hot water into steam. As it is shown in the figure this conversi...
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...s a consequence generator is powered. Overall, From the information supplied, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, so, then, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 903.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 187.0 196.424390244 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82887700535 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70021176657 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534759358289 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 279.9 283.868780488 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6822207485 43.030603864 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.875 112.824112599 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.375 22.9334400587 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 5.23603664747 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0242701702189 0.215688989381 11% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00905367709989 0.103423049105 9% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0162950746854 0.0843802449381 19% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0147722278764 0.15604864568 9% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0184066239855 0.0819641961636 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.2329268293 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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