The graph below gives information about the progress of certain diseases during childhood between 1950 and 2000 in a developing country

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The graph below gives information about the progress of certain diseases during childhood between 1950 and 2000 in a developing country.

The graph illustrates the developments of 4 diseases, namely AIDS, Malaria, Smallpox and Tuberculosis during childhood in developing countries from 1950 to 2000.

          The first noticeable thing is that the annual cases of Tuberculosis and Smallpox declined significantly for the first 3 decades. Tuberculosis saw a decrease from 8000 cases to 5000 and the figure for Smallpox declined from around 4000 to 2000. But the number of cases for Malaria experienced fluctuation around 2000 cases between 1950 and 1970.

For the following three decades the pattern for Malaria stayed unchanged. Moreover, there was a remarkable increase in cases of AIDS, rising from 1000 in 1980 to roughly 5000 in 2000. It was recorded 1000 AIDS cases in 1980 before experiencing fivefold increase at the end of the given period . The trend for Tuberculosis constituted just over 2000 in 1980. Further, it rose steadily, reaching around 4000 cases by 2000.

Overall, it’s worth to note that the Smallpox existed between 1950 and 1970, after 1970 this type of disease disappeared. However, from 1970 the countries began to suffer from new illness called AIDS.  

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 982.0 965.302439024 102% => OK
No of words: 184.0 196.424390244 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33695652174 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92334999005 2.65546596893 110% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58152173913 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 263.7 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.3321317395 43.030603864 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.2727272727 112.824112599 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7272727273 22.9334400587 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.23603664747 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165010718643 0.215688989381 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690795326949 0.103423049105 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0905875138108 0.0843802449381 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135648282942 0.15604864568 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113829997704 0.0819641961636 139% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 61.2550243902 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 11.4140731707 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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