The graph below shows the percentage change in the nubmer of international students graduating from universities in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.-alam-(re-write)

This diagram information shows that from adults graduating from Canadian universities and comparison aid years from 2001 to 2006. Foremost six different cities data have given.
To begin with an Ontario since 2001 2% graduate while 2006 exactly 6%. The second one is Newfoundland & labrador in this city a slightly change from previous one in the year 2001 near to reach 3% as compared to 2006 reached 8%. British Columbia this have been data in 2001 around 5% while the 2006 year graduating boom 10%. Moreover remaining cities despite graduating data almost on an average similar apart from others. However, New Brunswick since the 2001 year a data increased except to this city and most impacts in the 2006 year percentage ratio around reached 12%.
To sum up British Columbia and Nova Scotia has exactly the same data in the year 2006. New Brunswick is the upward position from others.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 154, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cities'' or 'city's'?
Suggestion: cities'; city's
...om 2001 to 2006. Foremost six different cities data have given. To begin with an Onta...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 126, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('slightly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('change') instead of another adjective.
...is Newfoundland & labrador in this city a slightly change from previous one in the year 2001 near...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 324, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...hile the 2006 year graduating boom 10%. Moreover remaining cities despite graduating dat...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, second, so, while, apart from, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 742.0 965.302439024 77% => OK
No of words: 150.0 196.424390244 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94666666667 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.49963551158 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40943134662 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 90.0 106.607317073 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 212.4 283.868780488 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.1083575293 43.030603864 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.4444444444 112.824112599 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6666666667 22.9334400587 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 5.23603664747 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221751403594 0.215688989381 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0993923833182 0.103423049105 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0739502664378 0.0843802449381 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16486826366 0.15604864568 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0886494214696 0.0819641961636 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.2329268293 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 61.2550243902 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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