The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

Given is a line graph which illustrates the amount of the elderly population in a century from 1940 to 2040 in three different countries.
A glance at this graph depicts that all three lines have a growing trend during this period, which means the population is getting older in these countries.
At 1940 nearly ten percent of USA population aged more than 65 years old. Meanwhile, in Japan old people contained only 5% of population and in Sweden this amount was a little higher than Japan.
It is clear that over the next 60 years the number of elderly citizens in Japan showed a slight decline, when around year 2000 it started to rise and got to 10%. A few years later it dramatically rose to more than 25%.
We can also observe that the proportion of the population aged 65 or over in USA and Sweden fluctuated over this given century. However, at first the percentage of over aged population in USA was higher than this amount in Sweden, as we can see in this graph, in the 1990’s the population in Sweden got older and the line which depicts Sweden old population took over USA’s and continued to rise to more than 25% at 2040.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 128, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...den fluctuated over this given century. However at first the percentage of over aged po...
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Line 5, column 259, Rule ID: IN_1990s[2]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1990’s'.
Suggestion: in the 1990’s
...in Sweden, as we can see in this graph, in 1990’s the population in Sweden got older and ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 417, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...inued to rise to more than 25% at 2040.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 15.0 5.60731707317 268% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.97073170732 227% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 934.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 206.0 196.424390244 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53398058252 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78849575616 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41300713839 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504854368932 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 283.5 283.868780488 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.0107267533 43.030603864 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.75 112.824112599 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.75 22.9334400587 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 5.23603664747 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194357613183 0.215688989381 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0959704117849 0.103423049105 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630696012233 0.0843802449381 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112491224477 0.15604864568 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523917644428 0.0819641961636 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 61.2550243902 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.29 11.4140731707 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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