household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia

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household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia

The pie charts illustrate the comparison of how much money mere spent by two population of a certain asian countries on different household purposes in the year 2010 in units of percentage.

Overall, both Japanese and Malaysian people invested money in 5 diverse housing sectors, of which other goods and services as well as housing were the highest, respectively, followed by food. Though health care and transport also were included to average expenses, in comparison to those domestic spending, which were mentioned above, health care was the smallest segment. Evidently, as we can see, almost all sectors in both countries were relatively similar.

Comparing diverse expenditures in countries, while other goods and services made up a biggest segment, nearly 29% in Japan, this sector was smaller in Malaysia, 26% and housing contributed most to nations expenditures, reaching 34%. In contrast, less money Peoples spent on transport in Malaysia, about 10%, yet Japanese nation spent their cash on this type of household purpose more, at 20%; meanwhile population practically did not spend monies on health care. It was the least significant part of Asian expenditures in the year 2010, 6 and 3%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 108, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'country'?
Suggestion: country
...nt by two population of a certain asian countries on different household purposes in the ...
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Line 5, column 462, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...both countries were relatively similar. Comparing diverse expenditures in countr...
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Line 9, column 85, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
... while other goods and services made up a biggest segment, nearly 29% in Japan, t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, while, in contrast, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1022.0 965.302439024 106% => OK
No of words: 191.0 196.424390244 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35078534031 4.92477711251 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8264299832 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 106.607317073 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65445026178 0.547539520022 120% => OK
syllable_count: 304.2 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.9270926497 43.030603864 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.0 112.824112599 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2857142857 22.9334400587 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85714285714 5.23603664747 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164353834924 0.215688989381 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641375505197 0.103423049105 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654784595817 0.0843802449381 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103141129451 0.15604864568 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106474511189 0.0819641961636 130% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.2329268293 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 61.2550243902 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.3012195122 134% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 11.4140731707 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.06136585366 119% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 40.7170731707 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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