Given pie charts, gives information about online sales four sectors; travel,film/music,books and clothes, in New Zeland in two different years.
At first a glance, it is clear that, Travel sector dominated in 2003, which contributed more than one third of the whole sales, become less popular over ten years. On the other hand pepole became more interested in film and music, and which accounts for almost one third of sales sector in 2013.
Firstly travel accounted for 36% in 2003, declined to29% in 2013, at the same time film and music met with a sharp increase to 33% in 2013. It seems people got more attention to reading book, as the statistics show a slight elevation of the rate from 19 to 22 percentage in 2013. Another sector shows spending money in clothing has changed a little bit, which was 24 percentage in 2003 ends up with 19 in 2013.
Overall, film , music and clothes met with a hike, at the same time, travel and books lost its popularity over the period.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, third, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 807.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 172.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69186046512 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65591683159 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 106.607317073 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.656976744186 0.547539520022 120% => OK
syllable_count: 234.0 283.868780488 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 11.8889418695 43.030603864 28% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 115.285714286 112.824112599 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5714285714 22.9334400587 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.23603664747 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 1.69756097561 530% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163570577143 0.215688989381 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791934962489 0.103423049105 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437017200224 0.0843802449381 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0926522358168 0.15604864568 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556267117174 0.0819641961636 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 11.4140731707 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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