During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Writie a letter to this businessman. In your letter:•

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During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Writie a letter to this businessman. In your letter:
• Remind him where and when you met
• Tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• Say why you think you would be suitable for this job

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Writie a letter to this businessman. In your letter:
• Remind him where and when you met
• Tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• Say why you think you would be suitable for this job

Dear Mr.Vu,

I am writing this letter to apply for a job vacancy as a cashier at one of your restaurants on Bui Vien street.
I believe you still remember your business trip in which I had the opportunity to meet you on the airplane two weeks ago. As we were having a casual conversation about work, you offered me the cashier position at your restaurant. Since then, I have been considering to take your offer and work under your supervisor.

After we parted, I searched for information of your restaurants on Linkedin and found that your staff members are highly satisfied working at your places. I have encountered many positive feedbacks about your supportive policies towards the employees. With a competitive salary and insurance, I am very interested in becoming a part of your workforce. In addition, I would say that your restaurants’ uniform really stands out from other places’ and looks incredibly stylish, which makes me quite fascinated.

As for your job requirements, I am a competent candidate holding three academic certificates and two years of working experience in this field. If requested, I could provide a reference letter from my previous employer showing my qualities as a very careful and reliable person in managing cash flow.

Should you wish to discuss more, please feel free to contact me anytime at your convenience.

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Best regards,
Truong

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ink you would be suitable for this job Dear Mr.Vu, I am writing this letter ...
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Suggestion: Vu
...ld be suitable for this job Dear Mr.Vu, I am writing this letter to apply f...
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Line 11, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...der your supervisor. After we parted, I searched for information of your resta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, really, so, still, then, as for, in addition, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 56.0 32.9175257732 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 26.3917525773 167% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1549.0 937.175257732 165% => OK
No of words: 314.0 206.0 152% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93312101911 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 3.78020617076 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92276365192 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 127.690721649 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589171974522 0.622605031667 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 467.1 290.88556701 161% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.83505154639 272% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 1.44329896907 416% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1499886866 44.8134815571 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8125 76.5299724578 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 16.8248392259 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.9375 4.34317383033 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 10.0 4.29896907216 233% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.496450910824 0.216113520407 230% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160961434659 0.0766984524023 210% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.188270746635 0.0603063233224 312% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220590912271 0.12726935374 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.264313930753 0.0580467560999 455% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 8.37731958763 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 8.71597938144 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 41.2886597938 174% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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