You are not satisfied with the changing rooms in a sports center that you visit. Write a letter to the manager.- What the problem is- How you feel about the problem- What steps you want the manager to take

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the low standard maintenance of the sports center, especially the changing rooms.

Yesterday, when I visited the sports center, I found out that the doors and windows of the changing rooms are broken, thereby causing inconvenience to players during changing clothes. Additionally, the electrical equipment and the lockers allocated to the members of the facility are not functioning anymore.

I am deeply hurt due to the current condition of the facility because huge investments were made by the local community for its construction. Furthermore, this negative development has tarnished the name of the sports center as well as the community.

Taking everything into consideration, I expect that you will investigate this matter and take stringent action against the people who are involved in the destruction of the property. I would like you to suggest that install the surveillance system and also pay surprise visits to monitor the security of the facility. Moreover, please refurbish the equipment and install new locks on the lockers.

I hope you will look into this matter seriously and take prompt action for the better management of the sports center.

Yours faithfully,
Deepak

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, look, moreover, so, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 32.9175257732 58% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 3.85567010309 311% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1076.0 937.175257732 115% => OK
No of words: 197.0 206.0 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46192893401 4.54256449028 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0374592805 2.54303337028 119% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 127.690721649 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.629441624365 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 325.8 290.88556701 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.41237113402 120% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7424854026 44.8134815571 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.6 76.5299724578 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7 16.8248392259 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 4.34317383033 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234233640848 0.216113520407 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722596736953 0.0766984524023 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0674021683591 0.0603063233224 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119065102679 0.12726935374 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0554105126733 0.0580467560999 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 8.37731958763 168% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 70.7449484536 62% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 7.45979381443 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 8.71597938144 165% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 7.59969072165 125% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 41.2886597938 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 8.62886597938 139% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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