You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall.
You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall.
Write a letter to the manager. In the letter:
describe what the group does
explain why the group is good for the community
suggest alternative days and times for practice
Dear Manager,
My name is Sharmistha ,I am the group leader of " Star band " musician group, who practices every Tuesday and Friday between 7 to 8 pm in your "Community Hall". It was informed that to us that we will not be able to use the hall anymore.
Our group performs in orchestras,festivals and family events ,etc. Firstly, we give the chance to disabled peoples who have skills but do not get opportunity to show their talent. Secondly, our idea is to generate employment to those who do not get normal jobs .In financial terms, it also helps them to run there family livelihood.
We are using the community hall when there is no other usage hall. This benefits the hall in two ways . Firstly, they can earn money by charging us some fees. Secondly, our group will perform free of cost for any events of the community hall. This will also help to develop name and fame in the locality.
If the reason to stop our practice is due to the time or day which we are using, then my suggestion is to change our schedule as per your convenience as we are flexible with our time.
I will be waiting for your positive feedback.
Yours sincerely
Sharmistha
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 971.0 937.175257732 104% => OK
No of words: 211.0 206.0 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6018957346 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69957655923 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.649289099526 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 304.2 290.88556701 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.13402061856 153% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3390406216 44.8134815571 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.6923076923 76.5299724578 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2307692308 16.8248392259 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38461538462 4.34317383033 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 2.54639175258 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185284126257 0.216113520407 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659815115198 0.0766984524023 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693862069025 0.0603063233224 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0923013681422 0.12726935374 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0776573411932 0.0580467560999 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 8.37731958763 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 8.71597938144 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.