You recently visited a store to repair your computer but they couldn't fix it , write a letter to the store manager and say,- what was the problem with your computer?- What happened in the store?- What do you want them to do about it?

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You recently visited a store to repair your computer but they couldn't fix it , write a letter to the store manager and say,
- what was the problem with your computer?
- What happened in the store?
- What do you want them to do about it?

Dear Manager,

I'm writing to tell you that last few days I visited your store to repair my computer that I bought from your shop and still under guarantee.
Let me tell you what the problem was. I turned the computer on for the first time, everything was working properly suddenly a blue screen appeared and kept restarting, the pc still brand new and I surprised, that’s why I brought it back to your store.

I clarified the problem to one of your employees, after checking from his side, the issue appeared again and nothing he can do. Therefore, he suggested to leave the laptop for diagnosing the matter since it’s an windows update error and the same fault happening with many other pc’s.
I would like to know if the issue repaired. If the pc needs a fresh windows installation, I prefer to exchange to a new desktop since it still within the warranty.
Thanks for taking these notes into consideration and expecting a feedback from your side as soon as possible.

Sincerely Yours,

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
Dear Manager, Im writing to tell you that last few days ...
^^
Line 6, column 215, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...r diagnosing the matter since it's an windows update error and the same fault...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, still, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 840.0 937.175257732 90% => OK
No of words: 175.0 206.0 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63487443065 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.668571428571 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 248.4 290.88556701 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.177781686 44.8134815571 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 76.5299724578 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.875 16.8248392259 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.875 4.34317383033 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255637646031 0.216113520407 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0867149384808 0.0766984524023 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0948128767094 0.0603063233224 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124298880182 0.12726935374 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106987366512 0.0580467560999 184% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 8.37731958763 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 70.7449484536 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 8.71597938144 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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