You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good You want to tell him how you feel Write a letter to the singer In your letter Say how you feel about his performance Give details of your musical activities Explain how you would

Dear John Brain,
I am writing with regard to your recent melodious concert I participated in two days ago at Respinas palace.

I am your true fan for almost 5 years and at your concert, I had the chance of meeting you for the first time in person. I greatly enjoyed this concert based on some potent reasons. Firstly, I cannot help but always feel the emotion in your voice and your voice always lifts my spirit up and put me in a huge pleasure, in fact, you are a peach perfect singer who always hit the right note. Secondly, the way you play the electronic guitar is like a pro as you are musically talented and supremely gifted in the field of playing instrumental music and much importantly singing. Along with this, I cannot ignore your unique music band harmony when they were playing vocal-instrumental music and drums in a magic astonishing way.

Talking about my background in music, I have been playing electronic guitar in a music band called Rose for almost 7 years. Our five-member band gives some gigs in different cafes two or three times a week. Moreover, I am a skilled as well as a competent composer as I have composed 12 international tracks for different music bands and singers.

I would appreciate it if you could free up time to join our upcoming performance on April First at 9 pm in Sunflower cafe which is located at 24 street. Certainly, having comments on our group performance by a highly skilled individual like you would be a big aid for our group to improve. Moreover, I would be grateful if you could observe my performance while I am playing electronic guitar and provide some technical points to advance my abilities.

We would highly be grateful for your warm presence in our gigs if you find it feasible to join.

I am eager to earn your affirmative feedback at your earliest convenience.
You could reach me via e-mail at hivafara77@gmail.com.

Thanks for your time and consideration.
Respectfully yours,
Hiva Farahani

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 33, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ience. You could reach me via e-mail at hivafara77@gmail.com. Thanks for your...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, in fact, talking about, as well as, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 32.9175257732 155% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 26.3917525773 140% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 937.175257732 175% => OK
No of words: 344.0 206.0 167% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76453488372 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 3.78020617076 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91342163477 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 127.690721649 153% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56976744186 0.622605031667 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 501.3 290.88556701 172% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.13402061856 164% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 12.6804123711 134% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.3021894276 44.8134815571 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4117647059 76.5299724578 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2352941176 16.8248392259 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05882352941 4.34317383033 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.29896907216 186% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 7.41237113402 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260461802659 0.216113520407 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0812906465877 0.0766984524023 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051342034059 0.0603063233224 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112692926514 0.12726935374 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0608482044002 0.0580467560999 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 8.37731958763 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 41.2886597938 182% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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