You work for an international company and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.Write a letter to your manager. In your letter• explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months.• Say how

Dear Mr. Anderson,
My name is Saeed Ataei, I am one of your employees in your Tehran headquarter in the "Urban Planning" division. I am writing to make an inquiry about the possibility of temporary work-place shifting.
I am a 32-years old ambitious person with a demand to expand my career horizon not only in my country but also at the international level; therefore, due to this prospect, I have decided to move to your Tokyo headquarter for the next six month i.e. from January to June inclusive.
In order to avoid any turmoil from my absence in my position, I have managed to convince one of my counterparts in Tokyo office for a six-month rotation. Not to mention we have checked and arranged every detail and even have provided a contingency plan.
I will be beyond grateful if you can consider this request with a positive attitude and it would be an enormously wonderful opportunity for both our firm's future and me whether you approve it and help me to fulfill my goal.
If you need any further explanation regarding the issue I would be appreciated to provide. I look forward to hearing from you about this matter.
Yours faithfully,
Saeed Ataei

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 67, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Tehran) must be used with a third-person verb: 'headquarters'.
Suggestion: headquarters
...am one of your employees in your Tehran headquarter in the 'Urban Planning' divis...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 210, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Tokyo) must be used with a third-person verb: 'headquarters'.
Suggestion: headquarters
...t, I have decided to move to your Tokyo headquarter for the next six month i.e. from Januar...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 224, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rove it and help me to fulfill my goal. If you need any further explanation regard...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, regarding, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 976.0 937.175257732 104% => OK
No of words: 203.0 206.0 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8078817734 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77462671648 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91598154745 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 127.690721649 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635467980296 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 315.0 290.88556701 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.0965922892 44.8134815571 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.444444444 76.5299724578 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5555555556 16.8248392259 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 4.34317383033 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192773752537 0.216113520407 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0720250166745 0.0766984524023 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0298096759122 0.0603063233224 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0944629525954 0.12726935374 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0207577935609 0.0580467560999 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 8.37731958763 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 70.7449484536 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 7.45979381443 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 8.71597938144 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 7.59969072165 121% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 41.2886597938 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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