You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter1. describe the training course you want to do2. explain what the company could do

Dear Sir,

I am a resident doctor working at your hospital and I am writing to you to request to provide your valuable support to me in a training course that I am very keen to do. I firmly believe that it will be beneficial for my job as well as for the hospital.

I have been working here since three years, during this time I have observed that many a times, at the time of emergency, resident doctors are unable to manage the patient on their own, due to lack of emergency training. This not a threat for the life of a patient but also for the hospital's reputation. Although, hospital has CCM team to deal with such emergencies but I think, it would be favourable for the hospital to train the resident doctors as well.

Furthermore, there is a training course going to happen next week in Delhi which offers the Emergency Management programme for the doctors at a very reasonable price.

It is my humble request to you to grant me a day off to attend this programme. Also, it would be great, if you could contribute into the fee that I have to pay to avail it since, I am working in this hospital and my knowledge will help me to serve you better.

Looking forward to your reply.

Yours sincerely,
John

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... my job as well as for the hospital. I have been working here since three year...
^
Line 5, column 88, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a time' or simply 'times'?
Suggestion: a time; times
...ing this time I have observed that many a times, at the time of emergency, resident doc...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 230, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to lack of emergency training. This not a threat for the life of a patient but a...
^^
Line 5, column 284, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'hospitals'' or 'hospital's'?
Suggestion: hospitals'; hospital's
... the life of a patient but also for the hospitals reputation. Although, hospital has CCM ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 66, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...raining course going to happen next week in Delhi which offers the Emergency Mana...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, look, so, well, as for, i think, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 32.9175257732 112% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1002.0 937.175257732 107% => OK
No of words: 226.0 206.0 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.43362831858 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52514955914 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557522123894 0.622605031667 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 313.2 290.88556701 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.5344184379 44.8134815571 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.2 76.5299724578 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 16.8248392259 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1 4.34317383033 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325199619773 0.216113520407 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127437086437 0.0766984524023 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544500709118 0.0603063233224 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16885078569 0.12726935374 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0832317923503 0.0580467560999 143% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 8.37731958763 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.71 8.71597938144 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 41.2886597938 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.2247191011 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.25 Out of 9
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