You work for an international company You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job Write a letter to your manager In your letter describe the training course you want to do explain what the company could do to hel

Dear Sir or Madam,
I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing regarding my request to join a training course highly related to my current job I am doing in this company.

I am Hiva Farahani a 28- year -old manager in General Motors company. In the department that I am managing over 50 staffs in London, I have several duties such as translating news or articles from English to Spanish and teach the staffs how to write formal Spanish letters to different organizations. Recently, I have been familiar with a productive course in which an experienced businessman wants to put a light on how to translate Spanish texts in a neat and flawless way. Along with this, the instructor will put a light on how to write a business email for experts with confidence professionally.

I appreciate it if you could confirm my paid leaves for a week since this course will take place in Dubai. I would be thankful if the company cover my trip expenses such as the expenditures on flight, hotels and food
As I am going to do this course not only for my self-improvement but also for the thriving of my department.

If I join this course I am going to be updated with all the ins and outs of the translation critical points. This course takes place every year in April and it is a well-known as well as a potent course in this field. I strongly believe after passing this international course I will be able to be more creative in the field of translation. Further, I could ask the head manager to hold a translation class in the company there I would be able to pass the knowledge I have gained in this field.

Thank you for your attention to this matter.
For further inquiries, you could kindly reach me via e-mail at hivafara@gmail.com
I am eager to earn your affirmative feedback.
Respectfully yours,
Hiva Farahani, Translation Department Manager

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, regarding, so, well, in general, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 32.9175257732 140% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 26.3917525773 163% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.85567010309 259% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1539.0 937.175257732 164% => OK
No of words: 330.0 206.0 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66363636364 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 3.78020617076 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92068554288 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 127.690721649 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539393939394 0.622605031667 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 469.8 290.88556701 162% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.9697607655 44.8134815571 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.6 76.5299724578 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 16.8248392259 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46666666667 4.34317383033 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 9.0 4.29896907216 209% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316855191749 0.216113520407 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105269232301 0.0766984524023 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061826010624 0.0603063233224 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139005083739 0.12726935374 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0610487866584 0.0580467560999 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 8.37731958763 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 8.71597938144 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 41.2886597938 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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