Keeping animals in captivity is cruel. There is no reason for zoo to exist in the 21 century.
How far you agree or disagree with this opinion?
I agree about that statement because the captivity of the animal is how keeping it’s extinction. Some kinds of animal have become extinct because of poaching. And then some kinds of animal have the high price in an international market. Therefore some kinds of animal were hunted on a large scale. Every time, people hunted to these animal to obtain the huge profits.
Therefore captivity is away out for keeping animal. Every country has regulation for keeping animal from extinction. If people are breaking regulation, they will get criminal law and fines. But we still find many black markets buying animals, so thwe animal extinction is difficult to prevent.
Nature reserves and wildlife refuges is how keeping nature hope so they should be balanced because nature is very important for animal life and animal will keep nature balanced. Besides poaching forest fire also declining animal populations as well as illegal logging. Forest police and society have responsibility for keeping forest.
Nowadays, the animal department have program breeding of endangered animal, in captivity, after the animal was old enough then it will be remove again forestry. This is also one of the ways of keeping the animal from extinction. Every year our government have budget for animal captivity, so the breeding program of endangered animals should always be continued to avoid animal extinction.
In conclusion, the captivity of animal is very important, we hope so animals are not extinct and then the regulation about keeping nature must be done by society and government. And also nature reserves and wildlife refuges must be continued for the balance of the nature.
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because captivity is how keeping animal extinction.
because captivity is the reason to keep animal extinction.
because poaching
because of poaching
some kind of animal hunted on a large scale.
some kind of animals are hunted on a large scale.
Our country have regulation
Our country has regulations
Sentence: Every time hunted to animal always done by people for reap huge profits.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to reap and huge
Sentence: But still so many black market buying animal, so animal extinction difficult to prevent.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to extinction and difficult
Sentence: Nature reserves and wildlife refuges is how keeping nature hope so balance, because nature very important for animal life and animal will keeping balance nature.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, present participle or gerund
Suggestion: Refer to will and keeping
Sentence: And then regulation about keeping nature must done by society and government.
Description: The fragment And then regulation is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace then with adjective
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to must and done
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