Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Useful adults have never been a person who develops a sense of competition only, they should also have the capability of cooperating with others. Therefore, each factor alone can’t be responsible for their success. This essay seeks to establish that these two characteristics are equally important contributing to an useful adult.

In order to be more useful, the person should be ambitious to reach a clear goal and enjoy a great relationship with others. The former can be achieved by developing a sense of competition in children, including encouraging them to excel and never falling behind o...

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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No. of Different Words: 227 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.596 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.058 4.6
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