Air travel can only benefit the richest people in the world. Ordinary people can get no advantage with the development of air travel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The past 10 years have seen a widespread phenomenon that airplane has become one of the chief travelling methods in most parts of the world already. Yet, there remains some perception as to air travel is a poverty discrimination because it can barely benefit the wealthy people. In this essay, I aim to contend travel by air can advantage all people with my threefold reasons.

First of all, it is an indisputable fact that the costly expenditure of air travel is the main obstacle to fly for ordinary people. While with the dramatic development of technologies in air travel domain, like the increasing number of planes along with the passenger load of each plane, the air fares are in decline. For this reason, the quantity of passengers who can afford the cost of air travel will ascend rapidly in the near future, as the consequence which has happened to motor vehicles.

Equally importantly, though, air travel is the most effective and quick transport measure. Admittedly, the most significant vantage of travel by railway or highway is its relative low fare; however, flying can shorten the travel time considerably. Therefore, even considering the expenditure, common people who have to arrive certain places immediately can also get profits from the convenience of air travel.

The last contributing factor supporting my perspective is that airplane is the only means of travel in some special areas, for example, central Asia where the populated cities isolated by deserts as well as a series of islands in Pacific Ocean. It fairly benefits the rich people and the ordinary under these conditions.

By way of conclusion, I reaffirm my position that air travel is not only created for the rich but also invented for the relative low income people because of its convenience and the plunging admittance.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
...hich has happened to motor vehicles. Equally importantly, though, air travel is the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81056736067 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.0324946771 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.0 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.58333333333 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.421051244771 0.244688304435 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156449294931 0.084324248473 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668783289905 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221500170834 0.151304729494 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0767752447257 0.056905535591 135% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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