Central and governments make a frantic attempt to promote festivals to create a lot of revenue. Some people think this money should be invested in social programs for the poor.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Submitted by akbarf on Tue, 01/07/2020 - 14:48

Nowadays, governments make a great deal of money via promoting festivals. However, the issue of how and where governments should spend this money is still widely debated, with some people claiming that is should be invested in for poor members of society. Personally, I obviously accept this, and will explain why in this essay.

Firstly, we have to consider that poverty is a universal problem that affects every nation on earth_ both rich and poor. For example, in African countries, we see a flood of emigrants leaving their poor nations to find better highly paid jobs with high-quality working conditions as well as better quality of life in wealthy countries. This phenomenon causes a very real threat to both destination countries and countries of origin in terms of crime and losing human capital, respectively. Therefore, poverty leads to serious consequences for not only deprived but also wealthy.

A further reason to support this idea is the development aspect. For a society to make progress, not only does it need investors but also it needs productive and responsible workers. Most of the impoverished are potentially valuable members who seek opportunity to lift themselves and their families out of poverty. By providing them with welfare-type programs such as social protection systems, vulnerable families can become productive members of society.

To conclude, I feel that investing the revenue in welfare programs such as cash assistance programs and social safety net programs for people living below the poverty level should be governments' main priority.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 203, Rule ID: IS_SHOULD[1]
Message: Did you mean 'it'?
Suggestion: it
...debated, with some people claiming that is should be invested in for poor members ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, still, therefore, well, for example, i feel, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1338.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.352 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85299561864 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.652 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 408.6 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6258221314 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.5 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28368180639 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0889579467514 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814638795771 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171270977808 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106467572108 0.056905535591 187% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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