Children who grow up in families which are short of money are better prepared with the problems of adult life than children who are brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is a statement that children brought up by parents with moderate salaries are likely to be well-prepared for their future compared to children raised by wealthy parents. This essay completely agrees with this statement because those children whose parents have short of money will easily adapt to extreme situations and the vast majority of offsprings having rich parents is subjective and dependent.
The primary reason why poor children are easy to find a way to adapt hard situation is that they have lived in a harsh environment since the very young ages. Living in a family with a shortage of money means learning to face material difficulties in life, sharing something with others and lacking many things which help them appreciate the value of money. This eventually pushes them to work harder for the brighter future less vulnerable and negative when failing because they get accustomed to hardship. For instance, Shark Linh, whose parents were really poor and had to work 16 hours a day for their livings, is now a very prominent and respectful businesswoman although her company has failed a hundred times.
The main reason why being brought up by affluent parents makes their kids dependent is that they always provide maximum care for their children. Since living satisfactorily with abundant supports, they become ignorant of the social world and money-related problems. This eventually causes many lacks in rich children like problem-solving skills, social interactions and labour appreciation, leading to money-consuming for entertainment and unnecessary things. For examples, most teenagers and adults spending a large amount of money on bars, clubs, drugs,... despite not making their own money.
In conclusion, I strongly agree that financial background has a profound impact on their social behaviours and characteristics, which helps children living in poor families are well-prepared for the future compared to children living in wealthy families
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 555, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...ge amount of money on bars, clubs, drugs,... despite not making their own money. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, really, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1678.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44805194805 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91885825508 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594155844156 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.6864128042 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.833333333 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236749234575 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0879185401798 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073447382499 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159062840633 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535652396912 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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