It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives.
Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, there are various challenges that people have to accept risks to adapt both in working environment and private lives. In my perspective, although this phenomenon could have both positive and negative consequences, I would agree that there are far more benefits.
It is true that taking risks have several drawbacks that people have to accept. Firstly, professional live could be affected by uncertain things. For example, families where parents play a pivotal role in making money to feed their children, it was hard for them when father decided to quit a job and run a business. In personal lives, taking financial risks could lead to troubles in their relationships. One of the most popular problems is that people want to get rich quickly and use all their money to invest in a risky thing like electric money or something like that. If it fails, they will be lost everything and family live can be broken.
On the other hand, risks are also mean opportunities. There are various advantages that risky things could bring. In the developed world, there are a lot of new jobs, innovative positions that would be a chance for people to experience and become success. Start-up companies are a good example, they take risks and take advantage of these opportunities to develop. Another benefit is that we will not develop if we live a safe life. The challenges always are a good way to upgrade ourselves, so taking risks and overcoming it will be both enjoyable and effective.
In conclusion, risks are parts of life and taking risks are important both in professional and personal lives. I believe that the benefits of accepting risks outweigh the drawbacks.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 67, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'risks adapting'.
Suggestion: risks adapting
...s challenges that people have to accept risks to adapt both in working environment and private...
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Line 3, column 448, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are always
... if we live a safe life. The challenges always are a good way to upgrade ourselves, so tak...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, so, for example, in conclusion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1392.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9537366548 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72554190307 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569395017794 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9431626746 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5625 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4375 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.409467199667 0.244688304435 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124268340454 0.084324248473 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0896911478225 0.0667982634062 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242774866168 0.151304729494 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0966975542564 0.056905535591 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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