Entertainment industry is becoming the most revenue generating industry. People involved in this industry are getting more money than any other industry. Role of electronic media in this industry is very vital which have created lots of space for stars to show their talents to the public. As for as my opinion is concern I must say that entertainers are getting higher pay than others, because of the popularity in masses. Some people think that they are not earning more money than others.
Despite the fact some people think that starts popularity is limited for a specific period of time and whatever they earn, comes from that period and after this grace period the income goes down. If we calculate in average we would know the actual facts. Stars like actors, pop stars and sports stars are those people who work really hard and some time they work in day night shifts, if we look their hard work we can say that they are not getting as higher pay as we think in terms of working hours.
As I said that I am quite agree about the fact that stars are getting more money than others, my opinion is based on few facts which cannot be neglected. Stars cannot be created in factories or laboratories they are born with the skills which are God gifted. For furthering my opinion I add that whatever they earn is because of their skills which they have naturally. One of the major reason of stars huge earning is the popularity, people get addiction of stars and they become crazy about their stars, they spend lots of money for only seeing them. Another reason is that the range of electronic media is widely spreading and actors, musicians and sports stars have lots of opportunities to get involve themselves for taking advantage of it. Stars are the ambassadors of country they represent their country internationally and government supports are always there for superstar.
In my conclusion I must say that stars are getting more money than others because of their popularity.If we realize and rationalize this fact, we can understand that there are so many other professions that can be paid more money for their works. Fire fighters, rescue workers and some civil servants are getting much lesser income in comparison with stars, which is I think not fare.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Entertainment industry is becoming the m...
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Line 4, column 85, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ts popularity is limited for a specific period of time and whatever they earn, comes from that...
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Line 4, column 197, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...this grace period the income goes down. If we calculate in average we would know t...
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Line 4, column 242, Rule ID: ACTUAL_EXPERIENCE[1]
Message: Use simply 'facts'.
Suggestion: facts
... calculate in average we would know the actual facts. Stars like actors, pop stars and sport...
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Line 6, column 27, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'agreed'.
Suggestion: agreed
...ing hours. As I said that I am quite agree about the fact that stars are getting m...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...than others because of their popularity.If we realize and rationalize this fact, w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, really, so, as for, i think, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 13.1623246493 198% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 54.0 24.0651302605 224% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1882.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 393.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78880407125 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42183584613 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4631043257 0.561755894193 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 582.3 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3080696216 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.625 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5625 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.875 7.06120827912 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.047721124911 0.244688304435 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0180498013262 0.084324248473 21% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0202758533774 0.0667982634062 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.038619963816 0.151304729494 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022985299132 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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