many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.

Submitted by Fate on Fri, 09/07/2018 - 12:49

There is no doubt that governments around the world generally aim to boost their people's quality of life. Yet, myriads of them believe that the principal means to achieve this is to focus mostly on economics. This approach has raised opposing views claiming that other aspects of progress are as important. While there are valid arguments to the contrary, I personally believe that all kinds of development need to be given equal priority.

It is evident that economics play a key role in reaching a high quality of life. When people's minds are occupied by all their economic problems, they may not be capable of feeling hopeful towards future. Therefore less collaboration can be made by them to help their country progress in other aspects. A good example of this is my country where the economy is getting worse and worse every day. Statistics reveal that a multitude of people suffer from depression and the only thing they aim is just to earn enough money to make a living.

However, concentrating merely on economics cannot be fully effective while neglecting other factors. While economy should never lose its importance, other aspects such as social, cultural and technological ones need to receive equal attention as well. Undoubtedly, all aspects of progress are connected to each other like pieces of a computer. Therefore, when one piece does not work properly, the whole system will be down. To cast light on it, take country as an example. This country is well-known for its wealth, whereas women do not have the minimum right as a human and many of them put their life in danger in order to achieve freedom.

In conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that although a society cannot progress without a strong economy, other effective factors need to be equally taken into account to reach the highest standards.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 206, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...able of feeling hopeful towards future. Therefore less collaboration can be made by them ...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, therefore, well, whereas, while, in conclusion, no doubt, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1548.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97749196141 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60692991479 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623794212219 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1259995657 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.75 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4375 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4375 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182561400117 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0537757843888 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0388264330252 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105272135962 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0130230876885 0.056905535591 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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