Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to be meant for adults only. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. What are its causes and what solutions can be offered?
In this modern world people get a different and wierd diseases. one of that problem is obesity which is children and teenager have this disease. this problem has several reason and these cause has some solution that will be describe in the next paragraph.
As mentioned above, obesity has some reason. The firs one is new technology and computer games. young people like to play computer games for several hour. they don't have enough activity during the day. Hence their energy saved as some kind of dangerous hydrocarbon like triglicirin, cholesterol etc, in their bodies. The next reason can be inorganic foods. Most people use some fast food which is so harmful for themself and has bad ingredients that help to make them overweight. The third reason is transportation systems vehicles. people prefer to use car, bus, metro, etc instead of bicycle and walking.
On the other hand, above causes have solution. For increasing activity of children we should make them schedule for playing games and incorage and teach them new games which is need use energy. Also we should change the food habits of teenager. we should teach them eat organic food instead of junk food. the last solution is encourage people using bicycle and walking instead of using vehicles for short and medium distance.
In conclusion, I believe governments and parents should teach and encourage children to do activity and have healthy life. If they don't do that, governments found a lots of problem in the future society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, so, third, in conclusion, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 41.998997996 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1253.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.012 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45992194998 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 386.1 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.009106441 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.9473684211 106.682146367 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.1578947368 20.7667163134 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63157894737 7.06120827912 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.01903807615 319% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111203587867 0.244688304435 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0339086817676 0.084324248473 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378342953638 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0697013868303 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0347918333609 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 13.0946893788 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 50.2224549098 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.89 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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